Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (tense and article use).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, last week I went on a trip to Shimla and took many pictures of mountains, forests and valleys. Whenever I look at those photos, I remember how peaceful and beautiful the scenery was.

Suggestion: Clarify your preference and avoid contradictory statements. Use linking words (because, therefore) and specific reasons or examples. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and reduce filler words.

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because I live in the countryside where there are wide fields and lots of greenery. The quiet, peaceful atmosphere helps me relax, and I often enjoy walking among the fields to clear my mind.

Suggestion: Answer directly and provide specific reasons. Use linking words (because, since) and concise language. Correct awkward phrases and unnecessary repetition, and mention a concrete example if possible.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up there and know many beautiful places. For instance, I can appreciate local landscapes and talk to people easily in my mother tongue, which makes traveling and taking photos more enjoyable.

× Yes, I do like I do like to click the taking picture of different views.

✓ Yes, I do like to click pictures of different views.

The student used redundant verbs and incorrect -ing form: 'to click the taking picture' is ungrammatical. Use the infinitive 'to click' with plural 'pictures' for general action. Also remove repetition 'I do like I do like'. Improve by saying 'I do like to click pictures of different views.' Use the -ing form only when a gerund or continuous tense is needed, e.g., 'I enjoy taking pictures.'.

× I remember that last week we have visited to the trip and it was Shimla trip and I have clicked a lot of pictures which are related to the scene of the nature, mountains, hills and we really enjoyed whenever I see on these pictures and I still remember the trip and.

✓ I remember that last week we visited Shimla, and I took a lot of pictures of natural scenes, mountains, and hills. We really enjoyed it whenever I look at these pictures, and I still remember the trip.

The student mixed present perfect and incorrect prepositions: 'we have visited to the trip' is wrong. For a specific past time 'last week' use simple past 'we visited.' 'Visited to the trip' should be 'visited Shimla' or 'went on a trip to Shimla.' 'I have clicked' should be simple past 'I took.' Also 'whenever I see on these pictures' is incorrect; use 'whenever I look at these pictures.' Keep consistent past/simple present for memory statements.'

× Umm, I am living in the rural area.

✓ Umm, I live in a rural area.

Use 'a rural area' not 'the rural area' when speaking generally about where one lives. Also use simple present 'I live' rather than continuous 'I am living' for a permanent situation.

× So in a rural area where I'm living, there are the lot of fields and greener area there and it is quiet and peaceful and it give a refreshment to the brain.

✓ So in the rural area where I live, there are a lot of fields and green areas. It is quiet and peaceful and it gives refreshment to the mind.

Use 'the rural area' when specifying 'where I live.' 'The lot of fields' is wrong; use 'a lot of fields.' 'Greener area' should be 'green areas' (adjective and plural). 'It give' must agree with singular subject: 'it gives.' 'Refreshment to the brain' is unnatural; use 'refreshment to the mind.'

× And definitely I give a preference to view in the urban area rather than the, uh, rural.

✓ And definitely I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones.

The phrase 'give a preference to view' is unnatural; use the verb 'prefer.' Pronoun/article use: 'the, uh, rural' is incomplete—use 'rural areas.' Also contrast should be 'rather than urban ones.'

× I give a preference to look at the rural areas.

✓ I prefer to look at rural areas.

'Give a preference' is awkward; use 'prefer.' Also verb form 'to look at' is acceptable, but overall sentence is improved with 'I prefer to look at rural areas.' This uses correct subject-verb agreement.

× Definitely, I give 2 views in my own country because it's my birthplace and, and I, uh, bring up in there this place.

✓ Definitely, I prefer views in my own country because it's my birthplace and I was brought up there.

'Give 2 views' is incorrect and unclear; use 'prefer views.' 'Bring up in there this place' is incorrect tense and word order. Use passive past 'I was brought up there' to indicate upbringing.

× And moreover, umm, I have a lot of knowledge related to the different areas and, uh, related to my country.

✓ Moreover, I have a lot of knowledge about different areas in my country.

Use 'knowledge about' not 'knowledge related to.' Avoid repetition 'and related to my country.' Combine ideas: 'different areas in my country.'

× And I, even though I know the, my mother tongue language, basic language which is using in my country.

✓ And I even know my mother tongue, the basic language used in my country.

Remove extraneous articles 'the, my.' 'Mother tongue language' is redundant—'mother tongue' suffices. Use participle 'used in my country' rather than 'which is using in my country.'

× So I give a preference.

✓ So I prefer my own country for views.

'I give a preference' is incomplete and unnatural in English. Rephrase to a complete thought: 'I prefer my own country for views.'