Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more natural: correct word choice and grammar, reduce redundancy, and organize into a topic sentence plus one or two supporting details using linking words. Mention specific examples and explain why you take photos. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially coastal landscapes and mountain trails. For example, I like capturing sunrise over the sea because the colors and reflections are beautiful. I also post a few of my favorite shots on social media to share memories with friends.

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and add a linking phrase to support your preference with specific details and a brief comparison. Avoid vague phrases and balance grammar (e.g., 'villages provide green scenery').

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because villages offer green fields and quiet landscapes. For instance, the open fields, trees, and small rivers feel relaxing, whereas urban scenes are often crowded with tall buildings and traffic noise.

Suggestion: Improve fluency and grammar: avoid repetition, use a clear topic sentence, and give a concise reason with a specific example or plan. Replace phrases like 'God has given us' with more neutral wording and correct tense errors.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I have grown up seeing the scenery in my own country and want to experience different landscapes. For example, I would love to visit Japan to photograph cherry blossoms and unique cityscapes I haven't seen before.

× I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially scenic health stations and coastal landscapes.

✓ I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially scenic hill stations and coastal landscapes.

The original uses 'health stations' which is a wrong word choice; likely intended 'hill stations' (a common tourist term). This is a vocabulary error rather than grammar, but it affects correctness and meaning. Replace 'health' with 'hill' to convey scenic mountainous holiday areas.

× I often post the best shirts on social media to share it with my friends and followers.

✓ I often post the best shots on social media to share them with my friends and followers.

Two problems: 'shirts' is a wrong word choice for photographs and should be 'shots' or 'photos'. Also pronoun agreement: 'it' refers to 'shots' (plural) so use 'them'. Ensure noun and pronoun agree in number.

× I'll like taking photos because it lets me remind of the beautiful memories.

✓ I like taking photos because they help me remember beautiful memories.

'I'll like' incorrectly uses future modal/auxiliary; present simple 'I like' fits habitual preference. 'it lets me remind of' is ungrammatical: 'remind' needs an object ('remind me of') or use 'help me remember'. Using 'they help me remember' agrees with plural 'photos'.

× The areas of the village give beauty like the green area, whereas urban areas are all cluttered with tall buildings and are not very good to the eye.

✓ The areas of the village are beautiful, with green fields, whereas urban areas are cluttered with tall buildings and are not very pleasant to the eye.

Awkward phrasing and article use: 'give beauty like the green area' is ungrammatical. Use 'are beautiful, with green fields' to describe rural scenery. Also 'not very good to the eye' is odd; 'not very pleasant to the eye' is idiomatic.

× They are not relaxing.

✓ They are not relaxing.

Grammatically correct; no change needed. 'They' (views) with 'are' is correct. This sentence is acceptable as is.

× I prefer views in other countries because since birth I have have been living in my own country so I have seen my country a lot.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because since birth I have been living in my own country, so I have seen my country a lot.

Remove duplicated 'have'. The preposition 'in other countries' is fine. Add a comma before 'so' to separate clauses. Also the tense 'have been living' is acceptable to express continuous action from birth.

× Now I prefer to move to other countries and explore the world and beautiful views which God has given us.

✓ Now I prefer to move to other countries and explore the world and the beautiful views that God has given us.

Add the definite article 'the' before 'beautiful views' and use 'that' as the relative pronoun for objects; this improves clarity. Structure is otherwise fine, but adding 'the' makes the noun phrase specific and natural.