Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce filler words and repetition, give a clear topic sentence then two concise supporting details with a brief example. Use linking words (for example, also) to make the answer flow. Focus vocabulary: use singular/plural correctly (nature, wildlife, animals, well-designed apartments).

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. I especially like nature and wildlife because they offer vibrant colours and unexpected moments, and I also enjoy architectural shots of well-designed apartments for their lines and textures. For example, yesterday I photographed the facade of my own building to capture its interesting balconies.

Suggestion: Start with a clear direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (because, and, also). Avoid vague fragments and correct grammar ("greenery" is uncountable; say "green landscapes" or "lots of greenery").

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful landscapes and abundant greenery. For example, the rolling hills and small, charming houses create a calm atmosphere, and I also enjoy the fresh air and open spaces that you rarely find in cities.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer followed by two clear, specific reasons with linking words (because, so, therefore). Avoid repetition and fix grammar ("the greenery of my country gives me"). Add a short example or personal feeling to make it more vivid.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because the extensive greenery feels very peaceful and relaxing. For instance, walking through local parks and countryside paths helps me unwind after a busy week, so I often choose domestic destinations for short breaks.

× I mostly I like taking pictures of umm, natures, wildlife, animals, and uh, some sort of umm, beautiful designed, uh, apartments, et cetera.

✓ I mostly like taking pictures of nature, wildlife, animals, and some beautifully designed apartments, etc.

Multiple issues: 'natures' is incorrect plural of an uncountable noun 'nature' (use singular) so this is treated as verb in present participle? However according to list this sentence mainly needs correction of present participle/adjective form: 'beautiful designed' is incorrect because a past participle or adverb is required; use 'beautifully designed' or 'beautifully-designed' (adverb + past participle). Also remove duplicate 'I' and unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: say 'I mostly like taking pictures of nature, wildlife, animals, and some beautifully designed apartments, etc.'

× For instance, uh, yesterday I took a picture of my own building.

✓ For instance, yesterday I took a picture of my apartment building.

Sentence is mostly correct but awkward: 'my own building' is unclear in this context; 'apartment building' or 'my building' is clearer. Remove filler 'uh' and keep concise. This is categorized as sentence structure because clarity and natural phrasing are improved.

× I prefer views in rural areas the most since uh rural areas have the best.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas the most, since rural areas have the best scenery.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'the best' without an object; add the noun 'scenery' to complete the comparison. Also remove filler 'uh' and add a comma before 'since'. This is an article/phrase completion issue classified under article errors because a noun is required after 'the best'.

× Beautiful scenery is such as a nice uh, greenery uh, area umm, as well as umm some uh, beautifully designed homes, small homes, I like them the most.

✓ For example, beautiful scenery, such as green areas and small, beautifully designed homes, is what I like the most.

Original has incorrect word order and redundant fillers. 'Greenery area' is unnatural; use 'green areas' or 'greenery'. 'Small homes' should be combined with adjective order 'small, beautifully designed homes'. Use singular verb 'is' because the subject 'beautiful scenery' is uncountable. This fits incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and sentence structure corrections.

× Definitely. I like the views in my own country. My country is full of greenery, umm, full of greenery.

✓ Definitely. I prefer the views in my own country. My country is full of greenery.

Repeated phrase 'full of greenery' is redundant; remove repetition and filler 'umm'. Use 'prefer' to match question. This is an article/word choice issue and redundancy; simplified sentence reads more naturally.

× It is my the greenery of my country gives me the most peaceful and relaxing environment.

✓ The greenery of my country gives me the most peaceful and relaxing feeling.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and an extra pronoun 'my' before 'the'. Remove 'It is my' and restructure: 'The greenery of my country gives me the most peaceful and relaxing feeling.' Use 'feeling' or 'environment' but not both; this is a sentence structure error.