Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce redundancy ("take a picture" and "take a photo" say the same thing) and avoid filler phrases.

Example: Yes, I do. Sometimes I prefer to simply sit and enjoy a picturesque view, but if it’s especially beautiful I’ll take a photo to keep. For example, when I visited the coast last year I photographed the sunset to remember the colours.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then contrast both options concisely using linking words. Avoid hesitations like "Uh" and repetitive adjectives ("peacefulness and calmness"). Add a brief specific example to support your preference or neutrality.

Example: I don’t have a strong preference because both have their charms. For instance, rural views are calming—when I lived on a farm I loved watching trees sway and hearing animals—whereas urban scenery excites me because of striking architecture and vibrant city life.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct, concise answer and avoid repeating phrases ("actually" twice). Use linking words to explain reasons and be specific about examples. Correct minor grammar ("another countries" -> "other countries") and clarify the comparison between local and foreign views.

Example: I’m not sure yet because I haven’t explored much of my own country. The Philippines has many islands I haven’t visited, so I’d like to see more local scenery first; however, I’m also curious about famous landmarks abroad like the Alps or Mediterranean coasts.

× Sometimes I just like to sit and stare at the picturesque view, but there are also times when I feel like it's too beautiful to miss, so I would grab a camera and take a picture of it and take a photo of it for keepsake.

✓ Sometimes I just like to sit and stare at the picturesque view, but there are also times when I feel like it's too beautiful to miss, so I would grab a camera and take a picture of it as a keepsake.

The phrase 'for keepsake' is incorrect; 'keepsake' used as a noun requires a preposition 'as' to show purpose: 'as a keepsake'. Use 'as a keepsake' to indicate the photo is kept for remembrance.

× As a kid I used to live in a farm and I enjoyed watching the trees swing in the breeze and the animals as well.

✓ As a kid I used to live on a farm and I enjoyed watching the trees sway in the breeze and the animals as well.

The correct preposition is 'on a farm' not 'in a farm' and 'sway' is a more natural verb for trees moving in the breeze than 'swing'. This corrects preposition and word choice; primary grammar type here is singular/plural/preposition mix so treated as singular/plural issue for location wording.

× I enjoyed the peacefulness and calmness it brings.

✓ I enjoyed the peacefulness and calm it brought.

Use 'calm' (noun) instead of 'calmness' for natural collocation and match tense: 'enjoyed' (past) with 'brought' (past) rather than present 'brings'.

× Uh for the urban scenery I find it striking and the architecture as well really cool.

✓ As for urban scenery, I find it striking, and I also think the architecture is really cool.

Original sentence is awkwardly ordered and missing subjects for the second clause. Reordering and adding 'I also think' makes parallel structure and clarity.

× It's actually too early for me to decide whether I prefer the views in our country or another countries.

✓ It's actually too early for me to decide whether I prefer the views in our country or in other countries.

Use parallel prepositional phrases: 'in our country' and 'in other countries'. Also change 'another countries' (incorrect number agreement) to 'other countries'.

× Because in my country in the Philippines, it's actually it actually consists of a lot of islands and I have not visited most of its islands.

✓ In my country, the Philippines, it actually consists of a lot of islands, and I have not visited most of them.

Avoid repetition 'it's actually it actually'. Use 'them' to refer back to 'islands' (plural) instead of 'its islands' which is awkward. Also comma placement improves clarity.

× So there's more for me to explore and see in other countries.

✓ So there is more for me to explore and see in my country and in other countries.

The original implies only other countries offer more to explore; clarify intended meaning by including both 'my country and other countries' or simply 'more for me to explore.' Maintain present tense 'is'.

× I've only seen them in social media.

✓ I've only seen them on social media.

Correct preposition for the medium is 'on social media' not 'in social media'.