Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition, produce a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences). Also vary vocabulary (use verbs like "photograph" or "capture", and adjectives such as "breathtaking" or "vibrant").

Example: Yes, I love photographing different views. For example, I often capture sunsets because the sky turns vibrant shades of orange and pink, which look breathtaking in photos. I usually focus on composition and lighting to make the colors stand out.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then give one clear reason and a brief comparison using a linking word (e.g., "because", "whereas", "however"). Avoid filler words like "umm" and "uh". Use precise adjectives (e.g., "tranquil", "picturesque", "crowded").

Example: I prefer rural views because they are tranquil and full of picturesque landscapes such as rolling fields and quiet rivers. In contrast, urban areas are usually crowded and noisy, which makes it harder to find peaceful scenery to photograph.

Suggestion: Be concise and sensitive while giving a clear position. Begin with a topic sentence that states your preference (or balanced view), then briefly explain reasons with linking words. Avoid long, emotionally charged digressions in Part 1—keep it factual and focused. Replace fillers like "umm" and provide one concrete example of what you would like to photograph at home and abroad.

Example: I feel torn: firstly I want to explore and photograph all parts of my own country because of its cultural and natural variety, but I would also like to visit other countries to capture different architectures and landscapes. For example, at home I would photograph ancient towns and coastal views, whereas abroad I would focus on modern city skylines and unfamiliar natural landmarks.

× Yes, actually, umm, I am a person who adores doing that.

✓ Yes, actually, umm, I am a person who adores doing that.

No correction needed for grammar: 'adores doing' correctly uses the verb + -ing form after 'adore'. Keep as is.

× For example, I like to snap the sky, the clouds and the sunset.

✓ For example, I like to snap the sky, the clouds, and the sunset.

This sentence mainly needed punctuation for clarity; grammatically the nouns are correctly singular/plural. Added a serial comma for clarity when listing multiple objects.

× Umm, I think the colors of the sky at sunset time are one of my favorite scenes ever and I think I will not be bored about seeing it for the rest of my life.

✓ Umm, I think the colors of the sky at sunset are one of my favorite sights, and I don't think I will ever get bored of seeing them.

Replaced 'sunset time' with 'sunset' for natural phrasing, 'scenes' to 'sights' fits better, and corrected article/number agreement and pronoun reference: 'colors... are one' requires plural references ('them'). Also changed 'will not be bored about' to natural 'don't think I will ever get bored of'. Maintain present/future meaning.

× As a person who travels between city and countryside, I prefer rural views because umm, they are peaceful and they have a lot of picturesque scenes.

✓ As a person who travels between the city and the countryside, I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and have many picturesque scenes.

Added definite articles 'the' before 'city' and 'countryside' for specificity. Replaced 'a lot of' with 'many' for more natural usage with countable 'scenes'. Removed redundant 'they' before 'have' to avoid repetition.

× But in the city, uh, most of the time it's bustling and so I feel those things are missing somehow.

✓ But in the city, most of the time it's bustling, so I feel those qualities are missing.

Replaced 'those things' with 'those qualities' or 'those elements' to match abstract nouns; kept subject-verb agreement but improved word choice for clarity and formality. Removed filler 'uh' and simplified conjunction usage.

× Oh, it's a hard question because as a Palestinian girl who doesn't have the right to visit all the cities of Palestine according to the occupation, I want to see everything in my country.

✓ Oh, that's a hard question because, as a Palestinian girl who doesn't have the right to visit all the cities of Palestine because of the occupation, I want to see everything in my country.

Changed 'it's' to 'that's' for natural spoken response. Replaced 'according to the occupation' with 'because of the occupation' for correct prepositional use and clearer meaning. Ensured pronoun references are clear.

× So umm, after doing that, I want to visit another country and capture different things from different places.

✓ So, after doing that, I want to visit another country and capture different things in different places.

Changed 'from different places' to 'in different places' for correct preposition use with 'capture' (photograph) and to sound more natural. The '-ing' form 'doing' is acceptable here.