Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise, reduce fillers (umm, ah), and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words and correct pronouns/phrases (e.g. “their whole life” → “a lifetime of memories”). Aim for 2–4 sentences, varied vocabulary (e.g. remind → help me remember; memorable → meaningful).

Example: Yes. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments and create a visual record of my life. For example, photos of sunsets or cityscapes bring back the atmosphere and feelings of that day, so I can look back on them later.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence stating preference, then add two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. “because” / “so”). Avoid repetition and vague words like “exotic” without explanation. Correct small errors (sites → sights). Keep within 2–4 sentences and use varied adjectives (refreshing, peaceful, scenic).

Example: I prefer rural views because I live in a city and urban scenes feel familiar to me. Rural landscapes are more peaceful and scenic, and seeing fields or mountains feels refreshing and different from my everyday surroundings.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give clear reasons with specific examples. Remove fillers and correct grammar (a new things → new things). Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.” Limit to 2–4 sentences and add one concrete example (food, architecture, culture).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because traveling lets me discover landscapes and cultures that are unfamiliar. For example, seeing traditional architecture or tasting local food abroad gives me a fresh perspective and memorable experiences.

× I like to take pictures of different views umm I it always helps me to remind what happened before and also it's very memorable.

✓ I like to take pictures of different views because they always help me remember what happened before and they are very memorable.

The original has incorrect verb+ -ing and verb forms: 'helps me to remind' is incorrect; 'help me remember' uses base verb after 'help'. Also 'it always' mismatches plural 'pictures' so change to 'they always'. Use 'are very memorable' for noun plural. Use 'because' to join clauses clearly. Suggested improvement: after verbs like 'help' use the base form (help me remember), ensure pronoun number matches noun (pictures -> they), and join clauses with conjunctions for clarity.

× You can just take it in every moment and their whole life.

✓ You can just take them at any moment and throughout your whole life.

Pronoun 'it' and 'their' are incorrect because the antecedent is 'pictures' (plural) so use 'them' and possessive 'your whole life' or 'throughout one's whole life'. Also preposition 'in every moment' is unnatural; use 'at any moment' and 'throughout'. Suggested improvement: match pronouns to antecedents in number and choose idiomatic prepositions.

× Umm not only that, but also umm whenever I go to.

✓ Not only that, but also whenever I go somewhere, I take photos.

Sentence is incomplete and lacks an object/complement after 'go to'. Complete the thought by adding the destination or rephrasing to 'go somewhere' and include the main clause 'I take photos'. Suggested improvement: avoid sentence fragments; ensure each clause has a subject and verb and conveys a complete idea.

× I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas because first of all, I live in urban areas.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban ones because, first of all, I live in an urban area.

Using 'urban areas' repeatedly is awkward; replace the second with 'urban ones'. Also 'I live in urban areas' implies multiple areas; use singular 'an urban area' to indicate you live in a city. Use articles appropriately. Suggested improvement: use 'an' before singular countable nouns and use pronouns or 'ones' to avoid repetition.

× So maybe that's why I, I don't prefer it because that's the sites I always get to see.

✓ So maybe that's why I don't prefer them, because those are the sites I always get to see.

Pronoun 'it' refers to 'views' (plural) so should be 'them'. 'That's the sites' is ungrammatical; use 'those are the sites'. Also remove repeated filler 'I,'. Suggested improvement: ensure pronouns agree in number and use 'those' for plural demonstratives.

× But if you go to rural areas, it's very new, exotic.

✓ But if you go to rural areas, it's very new and exotic.

Comma splice and listing adjectives requires 'and' instead of comma when two adjectives modify the same noun phrase; also 'it's' refers to 'the experience' which is acceptable. Suggested improvement: connect adjectives with 'and' or use commas appropriately when three or more items.

× And even if you don't go abroad, you still can feel it's kind of, it's kind of refreshing to do so.

✓ And even if you don't go abroad, you can still feel that it's kind of refreshing to do so.

Word order 'you still can' is less natural than 'you can still'. Also duplicate 'it's kind of' removed and added 'that' for clarity. Use consistent structure 'feel that it is...'. Suggested improvement: prefer natural modal placement (can still) and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× Umm, I prefer umm, views in other countries.

✓ I prefer views in other countries.

Remove filler 'umm' for clarity. No article needed before 'views'. Suggested improvement: reduce fillers in spoken responses and keep concise.

× Umm, personally, I am a type of person who loves to travel and the reason why I love travel is that it's just very new for me.

✓ Personally, I am the type of person who loves to travel, and the reason I love to travel is that it's always new to me.

Use 'the type of person' rather than 'a type' for this meaning. Use 'love to travel' consistently; 'very new for me' is better as 'new to me'. Suggested improvement: maintain consistent verb forms and use idiomatic prepositions ('new to me').

× And I am, I love to see a new things.

✓ And I love to see new things.

Mix of singular article 'a' with plural 'things' is incorrect. Remove 'a' to match plural 'things' and remove repeated 'I am,'. Suggested improvement: ensure articles agree with noun number; use 'a' with singular nouns only.

× I love to experience a new, umm, new environment and I that's why I think.

✓ I love to experience a new environment, and that's why I think travel is important for me.

Sentence fragment 'and I that's why I think' is incomplete. Remove repeated 'new' and complete the idea by specifying what 'I think' refers to. Ensure each clause has subject and verb. Suggested improvement: avoid fragments and repetitions; finish the thought clearly.