Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện về ngữ pháp, từ vựng chính xác và tính mạch lạc. Tránh lỗi dạng danh từ (ví dụ ‘family garden rings’ không rõ nghĩa) và số nhiều không cần thiết (‘my families’). Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau bằng 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (địa điểm, cảm xúc) và kết luận ngắn gọn. Sử dụng liên từ hợp lý để câu trôi chảy hơn và tránh thông tin mâu thuẫn (ví dụ 'nostalgic and healthy' không phù hợp với ngữ cảnh).

Example: I love taking pictures because they capture precious moments. I usually photograph my family in our garden and scenic views on trips, then I look back at the photos to reminisce with my family and friends. Those memories make me feel nostalgic and happy.

Suggestion: Cải thiện độ chính xác ngôn ngữ, sửa lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc câu. Tránh dùng từ sai hoặc mơ hồ như 'PC of the city' và 'unattractive' khi ý muốn tích cực. Nên nêu câu chủ đề rõ ràng (urban/rural), đưa 1–2 lý do cụ thể kèm liên từ để liên kết ý, và kết luận ngắn gọn. Chú ý động từ và chia thì đúng (e.g., 'it makes life more creative and attractive').

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the vibrant city atmosphere. For example, I like photographing busy streets and modern architecture, where people’s energy and diverse activities make the scenes interesting. So overall, cities inspire me creatively.

Suggestion: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và ngữ pháp khi tường thuật về quá khứ, hiện tại và tương lai. Tránh lặp từ và dùng cấu trúc chính xác (ví dụ 'When I was young, I liked...' ; 'As I grew older, I explored...'). Nên có câu chủ đề trình bày sở thích hiện tại, sau đó giải thích ngắn gọn bằng 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về lý do và kết luận về dự định tương lai.

Example: I used to prefer exploring views in my own country because I enjoyed discovering familiar landscapes and family spots. As I got older, I still take many photos at home, but now I want to travel abroad more to see different cultures and scenery, which would broaden my perspective.

× 'I often take photos at family garden rings and on trips, then look back at them to reminisce with my families and friends, which always makes me feel nostalgic and healthy.'

✓ 'I often take photos in my family garden and on trips, then look back at them to reminisce with my family and friends, which always makes me feel nostalgic and happy.'

'Sử dụng số nhiều/số ít không chính xác: "family garden rings" is incorrect and unclear; use singular "family garden". "families" is incorrect when referring to one student''s family and friends; use "family". "healthy" is incorrect here because it describes physical health; context requires an emotion adjective like "happy" or "nostalgic". Suggestion: use correct noun forms and choose an adjective that matches the intended meaning.'

× 'If I have a choice, I would choose to be in the urban areas because I love the PC of the city, the people working very hard in their urban areas and it's make the life more creative and unattractive.'

✓ 'If I had a choice, I would choose to be in urban areas because I love the pace of the city, the people working very hard there, and it makes life more creative and attractive.'

'Thì hiện tại không phù hợp/không nhất quán: The conditional sentence uses a second conditional structure so the correct form is "If I had a choice, I would..." not "If I have a choice, I would..." Also "PC" is unclear; likely "pace". "it's make" is ungrammatical; correct subject-verb agreement is "it makes". "unattractive" contradicts intended meaning; use "attractive". Suggestions: use correct conditional tense, correct vocabulary, and ensure subject-verb agreement.'

× 'If I have a choice, I would choose to be in the urban areas because I love the PC of the city, the people working very hard in their urban areas and it's make the life more creative and unattractive.'

✓ 'If I had a choice, I would choose to be in the city because I love the pace of urban life, the hardworking people there, and how it makes life more creative and attractive.'

'Thì hiện tại không phù hợp/không nhất quán: Similar issues as above plus article and word choice: "the urban areas" can be simplified to "the city" or "urban life". Ensure the conditional form "If I had a choice" and verb agreement "makes". Replace unclear abbreviations with full words.'

× 'When I was young, I actually very like I want to explore all the views in my old country and when I getting older I can go somewhere in my country and capture some precious moments.'

✓ 'When I was young, I really wanted to explore all the sights in my home country, and as I got older I could go to places in my country and capture precious moments.'

'Thì hiện tại không phù hợp/không nhất quán: Mixed and incorrect tense forms: "actually very like I want" is ungrammatical; use past tense "I really wanted" to match "When I was young." "when I getting older" should be past or past continuous; use "as I got older." Also use "sights" or "views" and "home country" instead of "old country." Suggestions: keep consistent past tense when referring to childhood and use correct verb forms.'

× 'And now I want to explore more in the other countries to develop.'

✓ 'And now I want to explore other countries more to grow and develop.'

'Thì hiện tại không phù hợp/không nhất quán: Phrase "in the other countries" is awkward; use "other countries." "to develop" is vague; clarify purpose such as "to grow and develop" or "to develop my skills." Suggestion: use natural preposition-less phrase and specify the meaning of "develop."'