Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is short, unclear and contains incorrect phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Use natural expressions (e.g., “I enjoy taking photos of different scenes”) and avoid vague phrases like “watching real” or “hear it myself.” Keep it concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

Example: I enjoy taking photos of different views because photography helps me remember special moments. For example, when I travel I take landscape shots to capture the atmosphere, and later I look at these pictures to recall how the place felt. Therefore, taking photos is both a hobby and a way to preserve memories.

Suggestion: The response is confusing and contains inaccurate vocabulary. Begin with a direct statement (e.g., “I prefer urban areas”), then give specific reasons and use linking words (because, for example, so). Avoid literal translations such as “Urban Air” and unclear phrases like “rough 2nd.” Mention concrete aspects you enjoy in cities (architecture, activities, food).

Example: I prefer urban areas because they offer more variety in architecture and activities. For example, I enjoy visiting city museums, cafes and street markets, which give me new experiences and photo opportunities. So, cities are more interesting for me to explore and photograph.

Suggestion: The answer repeats ideas and uses weak phrasing like “literally know everything.” State your preference clearly, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (because, for instance) and avoid repetition. Mention what you hope to learn or see abroad (culture, architecture, cuisine). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For instance, visiting historic sites and trying local food helps me understand how people live elsewhere. Because of that, I enjoy photographing foreign places to broaden my perspective.

× I like watching real.

✓ I like watching real scenes.

The original sentence uses the adjective 'real' without a noun; this is incorrect usage of adjectives. Adding a noun like 'scenes' clarifies the meaning and properly uses the adjective. Suggestion: include the noun that 'real' modifies (e.g., 'real scenes' or 'real life').

× I just like taking pictures.

✓ I just like taking pictures.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. It is included to maintain the student's intended meaning and tense.

× I like recalling my moments, so I like to hear it myself.

✓ I like recalling my moments, so I like to tell them to myself.

The original uses the pronoun 'it' incorrectly to refer to 'moments' (plural), and 'hear it myself' is unnatural. Use 'them' for plural reference and 'tell them to myself' or 'replay them in my mind' to convey recalling. Suggestion: use plural pronoun agreement and a more natural verb phrase.

× I prefer Urban Air because I am currently located in a rough 2nd and that is where I literally go up growing up so I prefer urban areas to explore more.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I currently live in a rough neighborhood, and that is where I grew up, so I like exploring cities more.

Multiple issues: capitalization ('Urban Air' is likely incorrect) and awkward phrases. The correction addresses adjective use and word choice: 'urban areas' should be lowercase, 'located in a rough 2nd' is unclear and likely means 'rough neighborhood', 'literally go up growing up' is incorrect—use past tense 'grew up'. Also 'explore more' becomes 'exploring cities more' for clarity. Suggestions: use clear nouns, correct verb tenses, and appropriate capitalization.

× I prefer views in other countries. Yes, I prefer views in other countries because I literally know everything in my country, almost everything. So I prefer views in other countries to explore their culture and their tourist sites and others. So I prefer view.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I know almost everything about my own country. I like to visit other countries to explore their cultures and tourist sites, so I prefer views abroad.

Problems include redundancy, misuse of 'literally', awkward phrasing ('their culture and their tourist sites and others'), and singular/plural inconsistency ('So I prefer view'). The correction removes 'literally', fixes plurality ('cultures', 'tourist sites'), replaces 'others' with a clear phrase, and uses 'views abroad' to be natural. Suggestions: avoid overuse of 'literally', ensure noun plurality matches, and use concise phrasing.