Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it has minor grammar issues, slight redundancy, and exceeds natural phrasing in places. Improve by using a concise topic sentence, correcting grammar (e.g., "a hobby of mine" and "part of my job"), and avoiding repeated ideas. Keep the response to 2–4 sentences and add one specific detail or example to make it more vivid.

Example: I love taking photos of landscapes because they help me remember special moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets on family trips, which I later print and display at home. Photography is both a hobby and part of my job as a freelance content creator.

Suggestion: Your main idea is clear, but hesitation words (“uh”), repetition, and some grammar/word choice issues reduce fluency. Remove fillers, avoid repeating phrases, and complete your final sentence. Use linking words to connect reasons and give a specific example of a rural scene you prefer.

Example: I prefer rural scenery to urban views because it feels safer and offers more peace of mind. For example, I enjoy quiet coastal villages with sandy beaches and green rice fields, where I can relax and take clear photos without crowds.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses a clear preference, but it is slightly repetitive and ends abruptly. Improve by combining sentences to avoid redundancy, finish the final thought (e.g., "their friendliness"), and include a brief personal reason or example to support your preference. Keep language natural and concise.

Example: I prefer visiting places in my own country, the Philippines, because it offers diverse scenery from beaches to mountains. For instance, I enjoy hiking in the Cordillera mountains and later relaxing on nearby beaches, and I especially appreciate the locals for their friendliness and hospitality.

× It is important to capture photos because it serves as keepsakes of memories with family and friends.

✓ It is important to capture photos because they serve as keepsakes of memories with family and friends.

Subject-pronoun agreement and article use: 'photos' is plural, so the pronoun must be plural 'they' not 'it'. Also 'keepsakes' is correct plural. Use plural pronoun to match plural noun to avoid number disagreement. Suggestion: Replace 'it' with 'they' when referring back to plural nouns.

× So it's also a hobby of me not only to take photos but also my a part of my job.

✓ So it is not only a hobby of mine to take photos, but also part of my job.

Pronoun and possessive form error: use 'of mine' (possessive pronoun) not 'of me'. Word order and extra article 'my a' are incorrect; remove them. Also simplify structure to 'not only... but also...'. Suggestion: Use 'mine' after 'of' and maintain correct word order: 'not only a hobby of mine, but also part of my job.'

× I would say that I prefer rural areas sceneries over urban locations due to uh, largely due to uh, a more safe space and a more Peace of Mind.

✓ I would say that I prefer rural scenery over urban locations largely because it is a safer environment and offers more peace of mind.

Preposition and noun form errors: use 'rural scenery' (uncountable) or 'rural landscapes' instead of 'rural areas sceneries'. Remove duplicated 'due to'. Use 'safer' (comparative adjective) with 'environment' rather than 'a more safe space'. 'Peace of Mind' should be lowercased and 'offers' added for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'largely because' instead of repeated 'due to', use comparative adjectives correctly ('safer'), and choose correct noun forms ('scenery' or 'landscapes').

× Rural areas also offer more beautiful beaches, coastal areas, and lush green fields that.

✓ Rural areas also offer beautiful beaches, coastal areas, and lush green fields.

Sentence fragment: the final 'that' creates an incomplete clause. Remove the trailing 'that' to complete the sentence. Ensure each sentence has a verb and object sequence. Suggestion: Avoid leaving subordinate words like 'that' without a following clause; either complete the clause or omit the word.

× I prefer my own country which is the Philippines to other countries.

✓ I prefer my own country, the Philippines, to other countries.

Punctuation and restrictive clause: use commas to set off appositive 'the Philippines'. The original structure is understandable but improved by using commas to indicate the appositive and by removing 'which is'. Suggestion: Use appositive commas: 'my own country, the Philippines, ...' for clarity.

× Philippines is well known to be a beautiful archipelago in Southeast Asia.

✓ The Philippines is well known as a beautiful archipelago in Southeast Asia.

Article and verb phrase use: country names that are plural typically take 'the' ('the Philippines'). Use 'well known as' or 'is known to be'—'well known to be' is awkward. Use 'as' for a natural phrasing. Suggestion: Add 'The' before 'Philippines' and use 'well known as'.

× It has stunning beaches, mountain ranges and lush green fields which make it more enjoyable to travel to.

✓ It has stunning beaches, mountain ranges, and lush green fields, which make it more enjoyable to travel there.

Relative clause clarity and adverb use: add a comma before 'which' because it introduces a nonrestrictive clause. Use 'there' to complete the idea 'travel there' rather than ending the sentence with a preposition 'to'. Suggestion: Use commas for nonrestrictive clauses and prefer 'travel there' for natural English.

× Also, I love the locals because of their.

✓ Also, I love the locals because of their friendliness and hospitality.

Sentence fragment and missing noun: 'their' is a possessive pronoun that must be followed by a noun. Provide the noun(s) that explain why the speaker loves the locals, such as 'friendliness and hospitality'. Suggestion: Complete possessive expressions by supplying the noun (e.g., 'their kindness', 'their hospitality').