Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise, correct grammar (infinitive form, articles, plural forms), remove filler words, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Aim for 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to connect the reason and example.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me preserve memories. For example, on my last trip to Niagara Falls I took hundreds of pictures and later chose the best ones for an album.

Suggestion: Remove fillers, use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "lighting" not "lightning"), and give a concise reason plus a specific example. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word such as "because" or "for example."

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the architecture and city lights at night. For example, during Diwali in India the illuminated buildings and streets create a spectacular scene.

Suggestion: Fix factual errors (Niagara Falls is not in India), remove hesitations, avoid repetition, and give specific, accurate examples. Structure: clear topic sentence, a reason, and one precise example. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because India offers diverse landscapes. For example, Himachal Pradesh has scenic mountain valleys and waterfalls that I find more familiar and meaningful than foreign sights.

× Yes, definitely I love to taking pictures and I always try to click as many as I can because it helps me to remember best memories and best views of my life.

✓ Yes, definitely I love taking pictures and I always try to click as many as I can because it helps me remember the best memories and the best views of my life.

The verb 'love' should be followed by the base verb with -ing (love taking), so remove the extra 'to'. Also 'helps me to remember' can be 'helps me remember' (both are acceptable but the latter is more natural). Insert the definite article 'the' before 'best memories' and 'best views' to specify which memories and views are meant.

× For example, uh, while last trip for example, or my last trip to Niagara Fall, I took almost hundreds of pictures and then selected.

✓ For example, on my last trip to Niagara Falls, I took almost a hundred pictures and then selected some.

Use the preposition 'on' with 'my last trip' (preposition error combined with tense/context). 'Niagara Fall' should be plural 'Niagara Falls' (proper noun). 'Almost hundreds' is incorrect; use 'almost a hundred' or 'hundreds of' depending on meaning. The verb 'selected' needs an object — add 'some' to indicate selected pictures.

× Umm, I prefer the views of the urban areas, uh, because I love the big buildings, high buildings and especially at night when they are like lightning, uh, like the lightning festival or in my uh country, India, Diwali.

✓ Umm, I prefer the views of urban areas because I love big, tall buildings, especially at night when they are lit up, like during the festival of lights in my country, India, Diwali.

Use 'urban areas' without 'the' for general preference. 'High buildings' is better as 'tall buildings' and adjective order 'big, tall' is more natural. 'When they are like lightning' is incorrect; use 'when they are lit up' to describe illumination. 'Like the lightning festival' is unclear — specify 'the festival of lights' and place 'in my country, India, Diwali' for clarity.

× I prefer views in my own country because my country, India, has a lot of beautiful views, especially the mountainside, the the falls, the mountains, the you know, especially in Himachal, they have the big sliding mountains, a beautiful Niagara Falls.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because India has a lot of beautiful scenery, especially mountainsides and waterfalls. For example, in Himachal Pradesh there are big scenic mountains; however, Niagara Falls is not in India.

Avoid repeating 'my country' and 'India' awkwardly; use 'India has'. 'Mountainside, the the falls, the mountains' is repetitive and ungrammatical; use 'mountainsides and waterfalls'. The clause 'they have the big sliding mountains' is vague and uses incorrect pronoun 'they' — specify 'in Himachal Pradesh there are big scenic mountains'. Also the student incorrectly mentions Niagara Falls as if in India; clarify geographic accuracy. Ensure each sentence has a clear subject to avoid pronoun confusion.