Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief examples. Reduce repetition and correct small grammar errors (e.g., “a album” → “an album,” “sceneries” → “scenery” or “scenic views”). Use linking words like “because” or “so” only where necessary.

Example: I enjoy taking photographs of different views because it makes me happy and helps me build a personal photo album. For example, I often photograph seaside sunsets and mountain landscapes to remember places I’ve visited.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then give two specific reasons using clear linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and correct grammar (e.g., “I prefer rural areas to urban areas,” “there is a lot of traffic,” “the air is not as clean”).

Example: I prefer views in rural areas to urban areas because the air is cleaner and the scenery is more peaceful. For instance, in rural villages I can see fields and mountains without the noise and traffic you find in cities.

Suggestion: Answer directly and then give specific reasons with examples. Remove filler words like “uh” and avoid listing without structure. Use linking phrases such as “because,” “for example,” and “also” to organize points. Correct collocations (e.g., “I have already seen landscapes in my country,” “I want to experience different cultures and landscapes”).

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I want to experience different cultures and landscapes. For example, I’d like to photograph traditional villages and mountain scenery abroad to compare them with the familiar scenes at home.

× I like to take photographs in different views because it makes me happy and I can make a album, I can collect so many beautiful sceneries, I can add it for my collections, so it make me happy.

✓ I like taking photographs of different scenes because it makes me happy. I can make an album and collect many beautiful scenes to add to my collection, so it makes me happy.

Errors: 'to take photographs' is acceptable but using 'taking photographs of' is more natural (verb + -ing form for likes). 'Different views' -> 'different scenes'. 'a album' -> article error; should be 'an album'. 'sceneries' is incorrect plural form; use 'scenes' or 'scenery' as uncountable. 'add it for my collections' -> incorrect preposition and plural noun; use 'add to my collection'. Subject-verb agreement: 'so it make me happy' -> 'so it makes me happy'. Suggestion: use gerund after 'like', use correct articles before vowels, use uncountable/regular plurals correctly, and match verb to subject.

× Actually I prefer views in UMM rural area than urban area when we are comparing with the urban area and rural area.

✓ Actually I prefer views in rural areas rather than urban areas when we compare them.

Errors: 'views in UMM rural area' appears to misuse 'UMM' (unclear) and uses singular 'rural area' vs 'urban area' inconsistently. Use plural 'rural areas'/'urban areas' for general preference. 'than' is fine but structure should be 'prefer A rather than B'. 'when we are comparing with the urban area and rural area' is awkward and contains incorrect preposition and tense. Suggestion: simplify to 'prefer X rather than Y' and use plural nouns for general statements.

× Urban areas are more busy at the daytime and it does not have nice air and it has very traffic jam.

✓ Urban areas are busier during the day, the air is not nice, and they often have heavy traffic.

Errors: 'more busy' -> comparative of 'busy' is 'busier'. 'at the daytime' -> incorrect article and phrase; use 'during the day'. 'it does not have nice air' -> wrong pronoun and word order; use 'the air is not nice' or 'air quality is poor'. 'it has very traffic jam' -> incorrect determiner and noun; use 'they often have heavy traffic' or 'there is a lot of traffic'. Also subject-verb agreement: use plural pronoun 'they' for 'urban areas'. Suggestion: use correct comparative forms, time phrases, and collocations for traffic and air quality.

× Uh, actually I prefer views in in other country because I already viewed in my country.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in other countries because I have already seen the views in my country.

Errors: Duplicate 'in in'. 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' for general preference. 'viewed in my country' uses incorrect verb and preposition; 'view' is transitive/intransitive here—use 'seen the views' or 'visited'. Also tense: use present perfect 'have already seen' for experiences up to now. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use plural when speaking generally, and use correct verb and perfect tense for past experiences.

× So I want to get experience from another country.

✓ So I want to gain experience from another country.

Errors: 'get experience from' is understandable but unidiomatic; use 'gain experience in' or 'from' depending on meaning. Prefer 'gain experience in another country' when talking about cultural or travel experience. Suggestion: use collocations like 'gain experience' and correct preposition 'in' for location-based experiences.

× Uh, we use sceneries, pace, landscape, mountains and transport, culture, religion.

✓ I want to experience the scenery, pace of life, landscapes, mountains, transport, culture, and religion.

Errors: 'we use sceneries' is incorrect verb ('use') and 'sceneries' is nonstandard; use 'scenery' or 'scenes'. The list lacks parallel structure. 'pace' should be 'pace of life'. Combine into a coherent clause: 'I want to experience ...'. Suggestion: use parallel noun phrases and correct nouns ('scenery', 'landscapes') and collocations ('pace of life').

× So I want to take that all the things experience, get the experience.

✓ So I want to have all those experiences and learn from them.

Errors: Phrase 'take that all the things experience' is ungrammatical and unclear. Repetition 'get the experience' is redundant. Use 'have those experiences' or 'gain experience' and 'learn from them' to express intention. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'have', 'gain', 'experience', and avoid word-by-word literal constructions; keep sentences concise.