Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng; loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng (uh) và sửa một số lỗi nhỏ. Nên nối ý mạch lạc bằng liên từ ngắn và cung cấp một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ khi nào bạn thích nhìn bằng mắt thường). Ví dụ chỉnh sửa cụ thể: dùng một câu chủ đề ngắn, tiếp theo một hoặc hai câu bổ trợ với lí do và kết luận.

Example: I don't usually take photos of views because I'm not confident with photography and often struggle to use my camera. Instead, I prefer to appreciate scenery with my own eyes, especially when I'm relaxing on a weekend walk.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng và sửa một vài lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ "works" nên là "walks"). Thêm một câu hỗ trợ cụ thể hơn (kể ví dụ hoạt động bạn làm ở nông thôn) và dùng liên từ để nối ý rõ ràng hơn.

Example: I prefer rural areas because I love lush greenery and open fields. They make me feel relaxed and peaceful, so I often go for long walks or read under a tree when I visit the countryside.

Suggestion: Cải thiện: Tránh lỗi phát âm và lựa từ ("loose greenery" không phù hợp; dùng "lush greenery"). Tăng tính chính xác bằng cách sắp xếp câu: một câu chủ đề, rồi ví dụ cụ thể. Loại bỏ tiếng ngập ngừng và kiểm tra ngữ pháp (thêm dấu phẩy và mệnh đề hợp lý).

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled abroad yet and we have a wide variety of scenery. For example, there are lush forests in the Highlands and crystal-clear oceans along the coast, which I find particularly beautiful.

× I don't really enjoy taking photos of views because I'm not very, uh, confident with photography and I often struggle with uh, I often struggle to operate my camera. So instead of taking photos, I refer to enjoy the scenery with my own eyes.

✓ I don't really enjoy taking photos of views because I'm not very confident with photography and I often struggle to operate my camera. So instead of taking photos, I prefer to enjoy the scenery with my own eyes.

The main error is incorrect verb choice 'refer to' which should be 'prefer to' (verb + to-infinitive). Additionally, the sentence has repetition 'I often struggle' and filler words; removing duplicates improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + base verb for expressing preference and avoid repeating the same clause. Use 'confident in' or 'confident with' both acceptable; here 'confident with photography' is fine.

× I prefer rural areas because I love, uh, lush greenery and open fields. They make me feel relaxed and peaceful, and I especially enjoy going for works or reading outside when I visit the countryside.

✓ I prefer rural areas because I love lush greenery and open fields. They make me feel relaxed and peaceful, and I especially enjoy going for walks or reading outside when I visit the countryside.

The phrase 'going for works' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'going for walks'. This is a vocabulary/preposition-like collocation error. Suggestion: use the common collocation 'go for a walk' or 'go for walks'. Remove unnecessary commas and fillers for a natural sentence.

× I haven't had a chance to visit other countries, so I prefer views in my own country because we have a wide variety of scenery. For example, there are loose greenery, uh forests in the Highlands and crystal clear oceans along the coast which I find beautiful.

✓ I haven't had a chance to visit other countries, so I prefer views in my own country because we have a wide variety of scenery. For example, there is lush greenery, forests in the Highlands, and crystal-clear oceans along the coast, which I find beautiful.

Errors: 'loose greenery' is incorrect adjective choice; use 'lush greenery'. Also 'there are loose greenery' mixes plural verb with an uncountable noun; use 'there is lush greenery' or adjust list to plural nouns. Added commas and hyphen in 'crystal-clear' for correct compound adjective use. Suggestion: use 'there is' for uncountable nouns like 'greenery' or list plural items consistently.