Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và chọn từ vựng phù hợp; tránh lỗi số ít/số nhiều, chia động từ và từ không phù hợp. Nên nói rõ mục đích chụp ảnh với câu chủ đề rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể ngắn gọn, dùng nối từ để mạch lạc. Ngoài ra, giảm tiếng ậm ừ (umm/uh) để tự nhiên hơn.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memories and share interesting moments online. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to post on my social media, so friends can see where I have been.

Suggestion: Cải thiện khả năng tổ chức ý và dùng từ chính xác; tránh lặp từ và tiếng ngắt quãng. Nói rõ lý do chọn cảnh đô thị với 1–2 lý do liên kết bằng từ nối (because/also/for example) và dùng tính từ phù hợp (vibrant, busy).

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because they are more vibrant and full of activities. For example, cities have shopping malls, parks and many cultural events, so there is always something interesting to photograph.

Suggestion: Cải thiện trật tự từ và ngữ pháp; dùng các danh từ và tính từ chính xác (diverse landscapes, varied cuisine) và tránh ậm ừ. Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ địa điểm hoặc khoảng cách) và dùng từ nối (for example/for instance) để nối ý rõ ràng.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it offers diverse landscapes and varied cuisine. For instance, I can travel from the mountains to the beaches within a few hours, which gives me many different photo opportunities.

× Yes, I prefer taking picture of different view because I have a lot of photo to boss on social media and to reserve memories.

✓ Yes, I prefer taking pictures of different views because I have a lot of photos to post on social media and to preserve memories.

The sentence uses incorrect singular/plural forms: 'picture', 'view', and 'photo' should be plural when referring to multiple items. Also 'to boss on social media' is likely a wrong verb choice; 'to post' fits the context. 'Reserve memories' is not natural; 'preserve memories' is the correct collocation. Suggestion: make nouns agree with quantity and use appropriate collocations (pictures, views, photos; post on social media; preserve memories).

× I prefer urban area because they have many shopping malls and playgrounds, umm, uh, the and uh, their health ah and uh, in uh, urban umm is more bursting.

✓ I prefer urban areas because they have many shopping malls and playgrounds, and urban areas are more bustling.

Use plural 'urban areas' to match the general meaning. 'They' then correctly refers to plural 'areas'. 'Is more bursting' is ungrammatical and word choice; 'bustling' correctly describes busy places. Remove fragmented filler words and incorrect phrase 'their health' which is unclear. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and choose correct adjectives (bustling).

× I prefer the view in my own country because umm, it has diversity, landscape and a varied cuisine.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because it has diverse landscapes and a varied cuisine.

When speaking generally, use plural 'views' and 'landscapes' or use uncountable/adj form: 'diverse landscapes'. 'Diversity, landscape' is a mismatched list; parallel structure improves clarity. Suggestion: make items in a list parallel and use plural for multiple items (views, landscapes).

× For example, umm, uh, I uh, can travel from mountain to uh, beaches within a few hour.

✓ For example, I can travel from the mountains to the beaches within a few hours.

Use plural 'mountains' and 'beaches' when speaking generally, and plural 'hours' for 'a few hours'. Add definite articles when referring to general geographic features ('the mountains', 'the beaches'). Suggestion: use correct number agreement and include articles with geographic plurals; remove filler words.