Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), use correct grammar (e.g., "I like taking photos of different views"), and give one or two specific reasons or an example. Keep answers to 2–4 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, and) to connect ideas.

Example: I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me capture memories and see details I might otherwise miss. For example, when I visit a seaside town I photograph the coastline at sunset to remember the colours and mood.

Suggestion: Give a clear preference sentence and then support it with specific reasons or a brief comparison. Fix grammar ("I prefer rural views") and avoid vague statements like "necessary for." Use linking words such as "because" or "so" to explain why you prefer them.

Example: I prefer rural views because they are peaceful and full of natural scenery. For instance, the fields and mountains from my childhood help me relax and remind me of simpler times.

Suggestion: State your preference clearly, reduce fillers, and give specific examples with short explanations. Mention one or two places and briefly say what you like about them. Use linking phrases like "for example" and "because" correctly and finish the sentence coherently.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because the landscapes there are very diverse. For example, places like Naran and Kaghan have dramatic mountain scenery and clear lakes, which I find more appealing than many foreign destinations.

× Yes, I like very much of taking the pictures from the different, uh, view.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and word order. Use 'like doing something' or 'really like something' (not 'like very much of taking'). 'Taking the pictures from the different view' should be 'taking pictures of different views'—no definite article and use 'of' to link 'pictures' and 'views'. Also replace 'very much' placement with 'really' before the verb for natural English.

× I think, uh, it's very necessary for the enjoyment and in your life.

✓ I think it's important for enjoyment in your life.

The phrase 'very necessary for the enjoyment and in your life' is ungrammatical and redundant. 'It's important for enjoyment in your life' is concise and correct. 'Necessary' is possible but 'important' sounds more natural here. Remove the extra preposition 'in' after 'and'.

× Uh, I always prefer to want these type of things.

✓ I always prefer these types of things.

'Prefer to want' is incorrect and redundant; use either 'prefer' or 'want'. Also 'these type of things' should be pluralized to 'these types of things' or 'this type of thing'. The correct and natural phrase is 'I always prefer these types of things.'

× I always prefer View in the rural areas and I love it very much and I. Prefer only my childhood because I think this type of areas are very necessary for.

✓ I always prefer views in rural areas and I love them very much. I prefer them because they remind me of my childhood; I think these types of areas are very important.

Multiple errors: 'View' should be plural 'views' to match meaning (subject-verb agreement/number). 'Rural areas' already plural; use 'views in rural areas.' 'I love it' should be 'I love them' to match plural 'views.' The fragment 'and I. Prefer only my childhood' is awkward; clarify 'I prefer them because they remind me of my childhood.' 'This type of areas are' mixes singular 'type' with plural 'areas'—use 'these types of areas are' or 'these types of areas are very important.' Also 'necessary for' requires an object; better 'important' or complete the phrase.

× I always prefer view, uh, in my own country because I think different types, uh, of uh, areas are very, uh, beautiful in my state, like for example, Naran, Kagan, Mari, etc. And I.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I think different kinds of areas in my state, such as Naran, Kaghan and Marri, are very beautiful.

Use 'prefer views' (plural). 'Different types of areas are very beautiful in my state' has word order issues; place 'in my state' after 'areas' or use 'areas in my state.' 'Like for example' is redundant—use 'such as' or 'for example.' Correct place names: 'Kaghan' and 'Marri' (spelling). Remove the trailing fragment 'And I.' which is incomplete.