Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct singular/plural and tense errors and avoid repetition.

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I recently visited Kelowna with a friend and took many landscape photos; I saved them as memories and plan to print a few for a photo album.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce repetition and fix grammar (e.g., "I'm a nature lover"). Use precise vocabulary (trees, mountains, open fields) rather than vague phrases.

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because they feel peaceful and unspoiled. For instance, I enjoy seeing mountains, forests and open fields, which help me relax and inspire my photography.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear statement, give a reason and mention future possibility. Remove fillers (uh) and correct phrasing like "I don't get chance" to "I don't often get the chance".

Example: I prefer views in my own country because Canada offers diverse and stunning landscapes. However, I would like to visit other countries someday to see different scenery, such as coastal cliffs or historic cityscapes.

× I went to Kelowna with one of my friend and I took a lot of pictures on my trip and then I saved that for my memories for future.

✓ I went to Kelowna with one of my friends, and I took a lot of pictures on my trip, and then I saved them for my memories for the future.

'one of my friend' is singular/plural error; use 'one of my friends' because 'one of' requires a plural noun. 'that' referring to 'pictures' should be 'them' (plural). Add articles and commas and use 'the future' for idiomatic phrase.

× I prefer more views in rural areas as it keeps everything simple and natural and I'm the I'm nature lover.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they keep everything simple and natural, and I'm a nature lover.

'more views' is awkward here; use 'prefer views in rural areas' or 'prefer rural views'. 'it keeps' is incorrect agreement with plural 'areas' so use 'they keep'. 'I'm the I'm nature lover' has article and repetition errors; use 'a nature lover'.

× I love a lot the feels the the trees, the mountains.

✓ I really love the feeling of the trees and the mountains.

Original has word order and repetition problems: 'I love a lot the feels the the trees' is ungrammatical. Use 'I really love the feeling of' or 'I love the feel of' and remove repeated 'the'.

× So I just basically I just love the rural areas and the views of rural areas.

✓ So basically I just love rural areas and their views.

Redundant phrases 'So I just basically I just' and repetition 'rural areas and the views of rural areas' create poor sentence structure. Combine and simplify: 'Basically I just love rural areas and their views.'

× I live in Canada and there are a lot more nice views in Canada, so I just love all the views in Canada and I don't get chance to go to other country to get some more views.

✓ I live in Canada and there are many beautiful views here, so I just love all the views in Canada, and I don't get a chance to go to other countries to see more views.

'a lot more nice views' is informal and awkward; use 'many beautiful views'. Missing article 'a' in 'don't get chance' should be 'don't get a chance'. 'other country' should be plural 'other countries' when speaking generally.

× So as of now I'm just in love, uh, with the views that are in my country.

✓ So, for now I'm just in love with the views in my country.

Verb tense is acceptable but wording 'as of now' is fine; improved phrasing 'for now' is more natural. Removed filler 'uh' for clarity. No major grammatical tense error, adjusted for fluency.