Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and use a clearer topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid repeating ideas (e.g., ‘pictures’ and ‘memories’ overlap). Use smoother linking words like “because” or “so” once. Also prefer precise vocabulary (e.g., “scenery” instead of “scenarios”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenery, especially on vacation. For example, I often capture coastal sunsets because they remind me of that trip and the atmosphere. This helps me preserve memories and share them with friends.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence and correct basic grammar (e.g., “capture” not “captures,” “public transport” not “transportations”). Limit to 2–3 supporting details and use linking words like “for example” or “such as.” Be specific about what aspect you like (movement, architecture, lighting).

Example: I prefer urban views because they offer dynamic scenes. For example, I enjoy photographing crowds, trams, and interesting building facades at sunrise, which create a lively contrast of light and motion.

Suggestion: Give a concise main idea and support it with 1–2 specific reasons. Fix vocabulary and word choice errors (e.g., “garner” or “country” instead of “gantry,” ‘a different view’ not ‘different views’). Avoid vague phrases like “what the other countries can offer”; name examples of features you like (clear skies, architecture, landscapes).

Example: I prefer views abroad because the air is often clearer and locations offer distinct landscapes. For instance, I like photographing European city skylines and Japanese mountain villages, which look very different from my hometown.

× Yes, I like to take pictures of different views, especially when I go on vacation, because if I have pictures of the scenarios, I also have memories that I can always go and look back.

✓ Yes, I like to take pictures of different views, especially when I go on vacation, because if I have pictures of the scenes, I also have memories that I can always look back on.

The word 'scenarios' is used incorrectly; 'scenes' is the correct noun for views or sights. Also the phrase 'go and look back' is unidiomatic; the correct prepositional verb is 'look back on'. This fixes present tense and preposition usage for natural English.

× So I always try to take pictures of wherever I go.

✓ So I always try to take pictures wherever I go.

The original sentence is grammatically acceptable but contains an unnecessary preposition 'of' after 'pictures'. Removing 'of' makes the sentence more natural and maintains correct subject-verb agreement.

× I personally prefer views in urban areas because when you're walking in the city you can also captures that movement of people, the movement of the public transportations and even the buildings together with sunset, sunrise or even the scenarios.

✓ I personally prefer views in urban areas because when you're walking in the city you can also capture the movement of people, the movement of public transport and even buildings together with the sunset, the sunrise or even the scenes.

'Captures' should be 'capture' after modal 'can'. 'Public transportations' is incorrect plural; use 'public transport' (uncountable) or 'public transportation'. 'The sunset, the sunrise' require definite article for specific events; 'scenarios' should be 'scenes'. This fixes third-person/modal and noun/preposition/article usage.

× I prefer views in other countries because from my perspective there are a lot of traffic and air pollution so you cannot get a clearer view of even the sky.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, from my perspective, there is a lot of traffic and air pollution, so you cannot even get a clear view of the sky.

'There are a lot of traffic' is incorrect: 'traffic' is uncountable and takes singular 'there is a lot of traffic'. 'Get a clearer view of even the sky' is awkward; use 'cannot even get a clear view of the sky'. Adjusting commas improves clarity.

× But when you go on another gantry you get a different views of what the other countries can offer.

✓ But when you go to another country you get different views of what other countries can offer.

'Gantry' is the wrong word; likely intended 'country'. 'Go on' should be 'go to' for countries. 'A different views' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'different views' or 'a different view'. Also remove unnecessary 'the' before 'other countries'. These changes correct preposition, word choice and article/pronoun errors.

× So I prefer views apart from my hometown.

✓ So I prefer views away from my hometown.

'Apart from my hometown' can mean 'except for' rather than 'away from'; 'away from' clearly expresses preference for views in other places. This correction preserves present tense and clarifies meaning.