Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or an example. Avoid unnecessary phrases like "I'm a photogenic person" which may be unclear. Use linking words for coherence and keep to under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing landscapes and cityscapes because it helps me notice small details and preserve memories. For example, last month I photographed a sunset at the riverbank and later shared the best shots on Instagram to show my friends the colors and atmosphere.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence stating your preference, then use linking words (because, while, however) to present two specific reasons. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "open fields", "city skyline") and avoid filler sounds.

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer open fields and clearer sunsets, which make for peaceful and colorful photos. In contrast, urban views feature crowded streets and tall buildings that can feel busy and limit natural scenery.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and avoid trailing off. Provide a specific comparison supported by one concrete example or detail. Use complete sentences and avoid unfinished phrases. Mention what you like about your country's views and one contrasting feature of other countries.

Example: I prefer views in my own country, especially Punjab, because of its wide green farms and vivid sunsets that create warm, peaceful scenes. By contrast, when I visited Canada I noticed more urban skylines and tall buildings, which offer a different, more modern aesthetic.

× Of course, I'm a photogenic person, so I love to take the pictures of different views.

✓ Of course, I'm a photogenic person, so I love to take pictures of different views.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'pictures' in this general statement. Use zero article for plural countable nouns when speaking generally. Suggestion: remove 'the' to say 'take pictures'.

× I love to upload them on social media to share with my friends, such as Instagram and Facebook.

✓ I love to upload them to social media to share with my friends, such as Instagram and Facebook.

Use the preposition 'to' with 'upload' when indicating destination (upload something to a platform). 'On' is sometimes used colloquially, but 'upload to' is more accurate. Suggestion: use 'upload them to social media'.

× To be very honest, I prefer more views in rural areas as compared to the urban ones, uh, because in rural areas, uh, we have more clear sunsets, uh, more greenery and farms there as compared to the cities.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in rural areas compared to urban ones because rural areas have clearer sunsets, more greenery, and more farms than cities.

Multiple issues: 'prefer more views' is awkward — 'prefer views in rural areas' is correct. 'As compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'than' are better. Adjective order and form: use comparative 'clearer' not 'more clear'. Avoid redundant 'there' and filler 'uh'. Suggestion: simplify and use comparative adjectives and correct comparative structures: 'rural areas have clearer sunsets... than cities.'

× In cities, there are, are more infrastructure, uh, like the buildings.

✓ In cities, there is more infrastructure, such as tall buildings.

Countability and verb agreement issue: 'infrastructure' is uncountable and takes singular verb 'is' with 'more' as modifier. Repetition 'are, are' and filler 'uh' should be removed. 'Like the buildings' is vague; 'such as tall buildings' is clearer. Suggestion: say 'there is more infrastructure, such as tall buildings.'

× I love the views of my own country, uh, of really of Punjab.

✓ I love the views of my own country, especially Punjab.

Awkward phrasing 'of really of Punjab' is incorrect. Use 'especially' or 'particularly' to emphasize Punjab. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'I love the views of my own country, especially Punjab.'

× In Punjab there are more green farms and uh, clear sunsets as compared to Canada.

✓ In Punjab there are more green farms and clearer sunsets compared to Canada.

Use comparative adjective 'clearer' rather than 'clear sunsets' when comparing. 'As compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'than' is preferred. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: 'more green farms and clearer sunsets than Canada.'

× In Canada I have only seen the tall buildings on the.

✓ In Canada I have only seen tall buildings.

The sentence is incomplete and contains an extraneous 'on the' fragment. Remove the fragment and the definite article 'the' before 'tall buildings' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'In Canada I have only seen tall buildings.'