Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, fix articles and verb forms, avoid repetition, and add one specific detail. Use linking words if you explain why it matters.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photographs of different views. I usually photograph landscapes and cityscapes because they remind me of special moments; for example, I took a sunset photo at a hilltop that always brings back the memory of that trip.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and improve fluency by removing hesitations. Explain specifically what you like about urban views (e.g., lighting, architecture) and use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

Example: I prefer photographing urban views because the city lights and interesting architecture create dramatic scenes at night. For example, I enjoy capturing illuminated skyscrapers and busy streets which produce striking contrasts.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and vocabulary, be specific about what makes foreign views appealing. Avoid unclear words like 'fingered' and provide an example or reason using linking words like 'because' or 'for instance'.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because the landscapes and cultures are different from what I’m used to, so they feel more exciting to explore. For instance, I loved photographing coastal villages in Portugal because their colors and architecture were very unlike anything at home.

× Yes I do, taking pictures is one of my hobby and when I when I see different beautiful views I will take pictures of it because it is meaningful and will and will be my memories in my through life.

✓ Yes I do. Taking pictures is one of my hobbies, and when I see different beautiful views I will take pictures of them because it is meaningful and will be my memories throughout my life.

Errors: 'one of my hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' (singular/plural). 'pictures of it' should be 'pictures of them' to match plural 'views' (pronoun agreement). 'in my through life' is incorrect word order and word choice; use 'throughout my life'. Also added punctuation and removed repeated 'when I' and duplicated 'will'. Suggestion: ensure nouns that follow 'one of' are plural, match pronouns to their antecedents, and use standard phrases like 'throughout my life'.

× I prefer to take photos of views in urban areas because when it comes to night people oh go back home and the lights T turns on. It is very attractive and wonderful.

✓ I prefer to take photos of views in urban areas because at night people go back home and the lights turn on. It is very attractive and wonderful.

Errors: 'when it comes to night' is unnatural; use 'at night' (prepositional usage). 'people oh go back home' contains filler 'oh' which should be removed. 'the lights T turns on' has incorrect verb form and extra letter; use 'the lights turn on'. The verb 'turn' must agree with plural subject 'lights'. Suggestion: use concise time expressions like 'at night', remove disfluencies, and ensure subject-verb agreement with plural subjects.

× I prefer views in other countries because other countries views is distinct from my countries and it is so new fingered that I want to explore it and record it.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because other countries' views are distinct from those in my country, and they are so new to me that I want to explore and record them.

Errors: 'other countries views' needs possessive form 'other countries'' and the verb should be plural 'are' to match 'views' (singular/plural). 'my countries' should be 'my country' (singular) or 'my country's' depending on meaning; here use 'my country'. 'it is so new fingered' is incorrect word choice and meaning; replace with 'they are so new to me'. Pronouns must match plurality: use 'them' to refer to 'views'. Suggestion: use possessive for 'countries'' when modifying 'views', match verb number to subject, and choose appropriate expressions like 'new to me'.