Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Clarify vocabulary and reduce errors: use correct verbs (take/make) and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences and avoid filler sounds.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, when I travel to a new country I often photograph local people and landscapes to remember the trip. I usually share the best shots with friends and family online so they can see what I experienced.

Suggestion: Answer directly, choose one preference or compare clearly. Use linking words (because, however) and give specific reasons or examples. Avoid hesitation words and incomplete sentences. Limit to maximum five coherent sentences.

Example: I prefer rural views because the natural landscapes and quiet atmosphere make me feel peaceful. However, I also like urban views for their dramatic skylines and interesting architecture, especially at night when the buildings are lit up.

Suggestion: Be concise and grammatically correct: give a clear topic sentence stating preference, then a reason with a specific detail. Avoid double negatives and repetition. Use linking words like because or so to connect ideas and keep sentences complete.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I have not traveled abroad yet and there are many beautiful places here. For instance, I want to visit coastal cliffs and historic towns across my country because they show our culture and natural beauty.

× Of course, I love cooking different pictures, especially when I travel to the new countries or new places.

✓ Of course, I love taking pictures of different places, especially when I travel to new countries or new places.

The student used 'cooking different pictures' which is incorrect word choice; 'cook' is not used with 'pictures'. This is a sentence structure and verb choice error (26) and present-tense usage (6). Also 'the new countries' is unnecessary; use 'new countries' or 'other countries'. Suggestion: use 'take pictures' or 'take photographs' and simplify 'new countries or new places' to 'new countries or places'.

× I love taking photographs of people and scenery to save the that moments and also share the moments with all the people after my trip.

✓ I love taking photographs of people and scenery to save those moments and also share them with people after my trip.

The phrase 'save the that moments' contains a redundant article and wrong demonstrative ('the that'); this is an article/word choice error (22) and sentence structure problem (26). Also 'share the moments with all the people' is awkward; use 'share them with people'. Suggestion: use 'those moments' and replace the repeated noun with the pronoun 'them'.

× So I refer views in rural areas are because the they often provide landscape and scenery, which make me feel peaceful.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they often offer landscapes and scenery, which make me feel peaceful.

'I refer views' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'prefer'—this is a sentence structure error (26). 'The they' is a duplicated determiner and pronoun (26). 'Provide landscape and scenery' is odd; use 'offer landscapes and scenery' or 'provide landscape and scenery'. Subject-verb agreement: 'which make me' is acceptable if 'landscapes and scenery' plural; keep 'make'. Suggestion: use 'I prefer', remove duplicate 'the', and choose 'offer' or 'provide' with plural noun where appropriate.

× Uh, or why urban views also, uh, have many beautiful views such as the skyline or tall buildings that are always full of.

✓ Urban views can also be beautiful; for example, skylines and tall buildings can be very impressive.

The original is disfluent and incomplete: 'that are always full of' is a sentence fragment lacking an object—this is a sentence structure error (26). 'Or why' is incorrect connective. Suggestion: rephrase to a clear comparative sentence and complete the idea, e.g. 'skylines and tall buildings can be very impressive' or 'full of lights and activity'.

× Uh, because I haven't, never been to other countries. So I would love my country.

✓ I have never been to other countries, so I would prefer my own country.

The student combined 'haven't, never been' incorrectly; correct present perfect negative is 'have never been'—this is a present-tense/form error (6). 'I would love my country' is unnatural; in context of preference, 'I would prefer my own country' or 'I prefer my own country' is better. Suggestion: use 'I have never been to other countries' and 'I prefer my own country.'

× Uh, they have significant beautiful views around my country that I, I would love to visit it all of them in my life.

✓ My country has many beautiful sights that I would love to visit all of in my life.

'They have significant beautiful views around my country' uses the wrong subject pronoun 'they' and awkward adjective order 'significant beautiful'—this fits pronoun (12), article/adjective order (22/18) and structure errors (26). 'Visit it all of them' mixes pronouns incorrectly; use 'visit all of them' or 'visit all of these places'. Suggestion: start with 'My country has many beautiful sights' and use 'visit all of them'.