Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and gives examples, but it is slightly wordy and has some redundancy. Improve by starting with a clear topic sentence, limiting to 2–3 supporting details, and using linking words to connect ideas. Also correct minor phrasing issues (e.g., “I've never seen before” instead of “in my life”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different landscapes, such as cityscapes, mountains, and rivers. When I travel, I often look out of the window and photograph places I’ve never seen before, so I can share the best shots with my family.

Suggestion: Your answer states a clear preference but is repetitive and unfinished. Make a concise topic sentence, add one specific reason with a linking word, and finish the thought. Avoid repeating the same idea (e.g., ‘urban areas’) and keep it within 1–3 supporting sentences.

Example: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the modern architecture and dramatic skylines. For example, the contrast of glass skyscrapers at sunset often creates striking photos that you don’t usually find in rural areas.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses a clear opinion and gives a reason, but the wording is awkward and a little general. Improve clarity by using specific examples of foreign landmarks and a linking word to explain the reason. Avoid vague phrases like “the place.”

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often feature unique architecture. For instance, cities like Barcelona or Dubai have iconic buildings and landmarks that make the scenery much more interesting to photograph.

× I like taking pictures of different landscapes like the cityscape or mountains, rivers, and many other interesting views.

✓ I like taking pictures of different landscapes, such as cityscapes, mountains, rivers, and many other interesting views.

The sentence lists examples but mixes singular and plural nouns and uses 'like' awkwardly. This is a sentence structure and parallelism issue. Use 'such as' for examples and make similar items parallel (cityscapes rather than the singular cityscape). Also add commas to separate list items for clarity.

× For example, when I'm traveling, I like looking out the window to see beautiful places I've never seen in my life, and I take pictures of them so that I can show my family members.

✓ For example, when I'm traveling, I like looking out the window to see beautiful places I've never seen before, and I take pictures to show my family.

The phrase 'in my life' is redundant with 'I've never seen'; 'before' is more natural. 'So that I can show my family members' is wordy; use 'to show my family'. This improves conciseness and natural phrasing while keeping present continuous and present perfect tenses correct.

× I enjoy views in urban areas because of the modern structures and the skyscrapers.

✓ I enjoy views in urban areas because of the modern structures and skyscrapers.

The article 'the' before 'skyscrapers' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Removing it fixes sentence structure and improves naturalness.

× I like seeing the beautiful skyline and houses that are available in the urban areas.

✓ I like seeing the beautiful skyline and houses that are available in urban areas.

'The urban areas' is incorrect when speaking generally; drop the definite article 'the'. Also 'available in urban areas' is slightly awkward but acceptable; keeping it general without 'the' is more natural.

× So that's why I prefer the.

✓ So that's why I prefer urban views.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object after 'prefer the.' This is a sentence structure error. Provide a clear object (urban views) to complete the sentence and match the preceding context.

× I actually prefer the views in other countries because in my country we don't really have breathtaking architectural buildings like foreign countries.

✓ I actually prefer the views in other countries because in my country we don't really have breathtaking architecture like that found in foreign countries.

The phrase 'breathtaking architectural buildings' is wordy and awkward; 'breathtaking architecture' is more natural. Also 'like foreign countries' is unclear; change to 'like that found in foreign countries' to indicate comparison. This corrects sentence structure and clarity.

× In those places they have unusual buildings that stand for tourist attractions and the place.

✓ In those places, they have unusual buildings that serve as tourist attractions and landmarks.

'Stand for tourist attractions and the place' is unidiomatic. Use 'serve as' and 'landmarks' to convey intended meaning. Also add a comma after 'In those places' for clarity. This fixes pronoun/reference and word choice issues.