Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and communicates the main idea, but it is somewhat repetitive, has some hesitations (“I well”), and contains awkward phrasing (e.g., “keeps photos of storage of memories”). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, use concise wording, and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep the response to no more than five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph sunsets and cityscapes because they help me remember special moments. Moreover, looking at these photos later helps me recall where I was and how I felt that day.

Suggestion: This answer is descriptive and personal, but it contains hesitations, some awkward word choices (“much wider in terms of what I can see,” “better complexity”), and repetitive expressions. Improve by using clearer vocabulary (e.g., “more expansive,” “cleaner air”), remove fillers, and organize ideas with linking words to make it more coherent and concise.

Example: I prefer rural views because they are more expansive and feel more natural. For instance, there are fewer buildings and more open fields and trees, so the air feels cleaner and the scenery is more peaceful.

Suggestion: Your answer addresses the question and expresses a balanced opinion, but it has minor errors (“site” instead of “sight”), awkward phrasing, and slight repetition. Improve by giving a concise topic sentence, correcting word choice, and adding one specific contrast using a linking word (e.g., “however,” “for example”).

Example: I enjoy views both at home and abroad, but I especially like seeing landscapes in other countries because they offer new sights and cultural experiences. However, I also appreciate views in my country, for example coastal cliffs and historic towns that attract many visitors.

× I well, I do like taking pictures of different views and different days and settings because it keeps photos of storage of memories of what I've been through throughout the day in the year and it's good to look back at what you've been through and seen.

✓ Well, I do like taking pictures of different views, days, and settings because they store memories of what I've experienced during the day and throughout the year, and it's good to look back at what I've seen and done.

The original sentence has run-on structure, misplaced phrase 'keeps photos of storage of memories', awkward pronoun reference, and inconsistent tense/pronoun usage. Break the ideas into a clearer structure, use a plural subject 'they' to refer to 'pictures', replace 'keeps photos of storage of memories' with 'store memories', and use consistent first-person perfect/past participle forms ('experienced', 'seen', 'done'). Suggestion: divide long sentences, ensure pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents, and use simple verbs for clarity.

× I prefer views in rural areas because the view is much nicer as much wider in terms of what I can see.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the views are much nicer and much wider in terms of what I can see.

The original mixes singular 'the view' with general plural 'views' and uses awkward parallelism. Use plural 'views' to match 'rural areas' and parallel conjunction 'nicer and much wider'. Suggestion: keep number agreement between nouns and referents and use parallel structure for adjectives.

× I don't see buildings everywhere and it looks more natural to me as well as it feels like I have a better weather and air to breathe in and overall just a better complexity of uh green and blue balance with the white in the sky.

✓ I don't see buildings everywhere, so it looks more natural to me; it also feels like the weather and air are better, and overall there is a nicer balance of green and blue with the white sky.

The original is a long, unstructured sentence with incorrect article use ('a better weather'), awkward phrasing ('better complexity of green and blue balance'), and filler words. Use conjunctions or punctuation to separate ideas, use uncountable noun 'weather' without 'a', and rephrase 'complexity' to 'balance' for clarity. Suggestion: simplify clauses, correct article usage with uncountable nouns, and avoid fillers.

× I prefer views anywhere as long as it's a view.

✓ I prefer views anywhere as long as it is a good view.

The phrase 'it's a view' is tautological and uninformative; 'good' clarifies the speaker's preference. Also ensure 'views' (plural) matches 'it is' by referring to 'a view' as a singular example. Suggestion: add an adjective to specify the quality intended.

× I like views in other countries because it's something that I'm not used to.

✓ I like views in other countries because they are something I'm not used to.

The original uses singular 'it's' to refer to plural 'views', causing number mismatch. Change to plural 'they are' to agree with 'views'. Suggestion: ensure subject and pronoun number agreement.

× It's a new site to see and more things to explore and expand my horizons of knowledge.

✓ They are new sights to see, with more things to explore and opportunities to expand my horizons and knowledge.

The original misuses 'site' (a location) instead of 'sight' (what you see) and mixes singular/plural. Recast sentence to plural, correct the word choice to 'sights', and improve parallelism and clarity. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary ('sight' vs 'site') and maintain parallel structure.

× I do think that we should appreciate views of our own country since other people do come here to view those.

✓ I do think that we should appreciate the views in our own country since other people come here to see them.

The original has awkward phrasing 'views of our own country' and redundant 'do' in 'do come here', plus 'view those' is unnatural. Use 'the views in our own country' and 'see them' for natural English. Suggestion: remove unnecessary auxiliary verbs, use natural verbs ('see'), and ensure pronouns clearly refer to the noun.