Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details. Avoid repetitions and filler words (uh, such as). Use correct grammar: "I like taking pictures of different views, especially nature and portrait photography."

Example: I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph natural landscapes like forests and lakes, and I also take portraits of friends because I like capturing expressions.

Suggestion: Clarify and correct factual statements, keep one main reason with specific details, and remove fillers. If you prefer rural views, explain why with coherent supporting detail and linking words (for example, because, so, and).

Example: I prefer rural views because they are quieter and more scenic. For example, rural areas often have open fields, bike lanes and small roads, and I enjoy visiting beaches nearby for peaceful sunsets.

Suggestion: Be careful with word choice and clarity. Avoid vague or incorrect words like "abuse" and explain what you mean (e.g., pollution, maintenance, facilities). Give one clear reason and a concrete example, using linking words to make it coherent.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they often have better-maintained natural sites and clearer skies. For instance, when I visited New Zealand, the parks were very clean and well-signposted, so it was easy to enjoy the scenery.

× Yes, of course I like it taking a pictures from different types of views such as I like photography such as uh, nature photography and the portrait photography.

✓ Yes, of course I like taking pictures of different kinds of views, such as nature photography and portrait photography.

Errors: unnecessary pronoun 'it', incorrect article 'a pictures', incorrect preposition 'from different types of views', awkward repetition 'such as' and 'the portrait photography'. Suggestion: Remove 'it'; use plural 'pictures' without 'a'; use 'of' to indicate what is being photographed; use 'different kinds of views' or 'different types of views'; list examples clearly as 'such as nature photography and portrait photography.' This keeps subject-verb structure and fits present tense preference.

× Uh, mostly I like the views, uh, in a rural area because in a rural area, lots of building and, uh, different types of, uh, roads such as bike lane and bus line.

✓ Uh, mostly I like the views in rural areas because there are lots of buildings and different types of roads, such as bike lanes and bus lanes.

Errors: mismatch between singular 'a rural area' and plural 'lots of'; 'building' should be plural; 'bike lane' and 'bus line' need plural forms and 'bus lane' is correct term. Suggestion: Use plural nouns consistently ('rural areas', 'buildings', 'bike lanes', 'bus lanes') and include 'there are' to introduce existence. This corrects number agreement and makes the sentence natural.

× And I like to, uh, beach around the rural area.

✓ And I like to go to the beach near rural areas.

Errors: missing verb 'go' and incorrect preposition 'around the rural area.' Suggestion: Use 'go to the beach' to express visiting and 'near rural areas' or 'in rural areas near the beach' to indicate location. This fixes sentence structure and preposition usage.

× Uh, honestly, I love to, uh, view in another country because in my country there is abuse are not clear, but in another country, uh, everything is clear, like better and, uh, about nature.

✓ Uh, honestly, I prefer to see views in another country because in my country some aspects are not clear, but in other countries everything seems clearer, especially regarding nature.

Errors: incorrect verb 'love to view in', awkward pronoun/reference 'there is abuse are not clear', and inconsistent singular/plural 'another country' vs 'another countries' later. Suggestion: Use 'prefer to see views in another country' or 'I prefer visiting other countries for views.' Replace 'abuse' with the intended word (likely 'things' or 'aspects') and use 'other countries' or 'another country' consistently. Clarify meaning and maintain subject-verb agreement.

× So that's why I like to, uh, abuse in another countries.

✓ So that's why I like to be in other countries.

Errors: incorrect and inappropriate word 'abuse' used instead of a verb like 'be' or 'travel', and incorrect plural form 'another countries' (should be 'other countries' or 'another country'). Suggestion: Use 'be in other countries' or 'travel to other countries' to express preference; ensure correct quantifier 'other' with plural 'countries.'