Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make sentences more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct vocabulary (plural/singular), verb forms, and give a clearer example with the device or technique you use.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different places because it helps me capture memories and the atmosphere of a location. For example, I often use my iPhone to photograph sunsets and scenic landscapes, which lets me recall the colours and mood of the moment later.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, correct word forms and reduce fillers like “uh”. Use linking words (for example, however, because) and give specific images or reasons. Keep to maximum five sentences and avoid repetition.

Example: I prefer rural views because I enjoy the tranquility and natural scenery. For example, rolling hills and open fields help me relax and clear my mind. In contrast, cities feel too crowded and noisy for me, although they are convenient for work and entertainment.

Suggestion: Clarify the main idea and fix unclear words (e.g., “Bill” likely incorrect). Start with a direct topic sentence saying you prefer your own country, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, word order) and avoid repetition.

Example: I prefer the views in my own country. Nepal has stunning natural scenery, such as the Himalayas and scenic lakes, which inspire me. Whenever I travel around these areas, I feel relaxed and motivated to take photographs.

× Yes I do, I love taking picture of different places because it helps me to capture memories of special places and moment.

✓ Yes, I do. I love taking pictures of different places because it helps me to capture memories of special places and moments.

Plural noun after 'taking' requires 'pictures' not 'picture' (singular/plural). Also 'moment' should be plural 'moments' to match 'memories'. Add missing comma after 'Yes' and split into two sentences for clarity. Use consistent plural forms to match the context. Grammar Problem Type ID: 8

× Not only this but also it helps me to remember how the location felt.

✓ Not only that, but it also helps me remember how the location felt.

Use 'that' instead of 'this' to refer back to the previous clause. Also place 'also' after 'but' and remove 'to' after 'helps me' for correct verb structure 'helps me remember'. Add commas for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× For example, iPhone photograph casual sunset and scenic landscape.

✓ For example, I use my iPhone to photograph a casual sunset and scenic landscapes.

Lowercase 'i' should be uppercase 'I'. Original lacks subject and proper verb structure; add 'use my iPhone to photograph' to form a grammatical sentence. Use article 'a' before 'casual sunset' and plural 'landscapes' to match general reference. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26},{

× I prefer view in rural areas because I enjoy the tranquility and natural scenery uh, such as rolling in hills and open fields, which really showed me and calm my mind.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy the tranquility and natural scenery, such as rolling hills and open fields, which really soothe me and calm my mind.

Use plural 'views' for general preference (singular/plural). Remove extraneous 'in' in 'rolling hills'. Replace 'showed me' with 'soothe me' to express calming effect; 'soothe' is the correct verb. Place commas appropriately and remove filler 'uh'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× In contrast, uh cities feel too crowded and noisy for me, although they are convenient for work and entertainment.

✓ In contrast, cities feel too crowded and noisy for me, although they are convenient for work and entertainment.

Remove filler 'uh'. Ensure subject 'cities' matches plural verb 'feel' (it already did); this correction mainly removes filler and adds comma after 'contrast' for clarity. Identified as subject-verb agreement area for confirmation. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× I prefer Bill in my own country with cars compared to other places.

✓ I prefer being in my own country compared to other places.

Original 'Bill' seems incorrect; likely intended 'being'. Remove 'with cars' which is unclear and irrelevant. Use 'being in my own country' to express preference. This fixes pronoun/word choice errors. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× Nepal is really beautiful and rich in natural beauty.

✓ Nepal is really beautiful and rich in natural scenery.

Avoid redundancy 'beautiful' and 'natural beauty' by replacing with 'natural scenery' for clearer expression. This fixes sentence-level style and redundancy. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× For example, the Himalayas, the scenic lakes and tourist areas.

✓ For example, the Himalayas, scenic lakes, and tourist areas.

This fragment lacks a verb; integrate as a list continuing the previous sentence or make it a complete clause. Here it's corrected to a proper list with commas and removed unnecessary article 'the' before 'scenic lakes'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× Whenever, whenever I travel around this area, I feel it relaxed me and inspired me.

✓ Whenever I travel around this area, I feel relaxed and inspired.

Remove duplicate 'whenever'. Use present simple 'feel' with adjective complements 'relaxed and inspired' rather than past 'relaxed me and inspired me'. 'Feel it relaxed me' is incorrect structure. This keeps present tense consistent. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6