Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and correct grammar to sound more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific reason and one brief example. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "I can I can").

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I visit a park I often photograph the sunset so I can look back at it later and recall the atmosphere and colors.

Suggestion: Make the topic sentence direct and fix awkward phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "for example"). Provide one clear specific detail and correct collocations ("the countryside calms me", "closer to nature").

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside calms me. For example, seeing crops swaying in the fields and farm animals grazing makes me feel relaxed and closer to nature.

Suggestion: Avoid filler words ("uh") and unclear phrases like "without any business exploration." State a clear preference and give a brief reason with a specific example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., "unspoiled" or "not commercialized").

Example: I prefer views in Japan because many places, such as Mount Fuji, are unspoiled and very scenic. For example, the area around Mount Fuji offers pristine lakes and forests that feel peaceful and natural rather than commercialized.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I think pictures can help me recall the visualized moments and I can I can appreciate the beautiful views when I was go home.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I think pictures can help me recall visual moments and I can appreciate the beautiful views when I go home.

Errors: repeated phrase 'I can I can' and incorrect verb form 'was go home'. The repeated phrase is a simple repetition mistake; remove the duplicate 'I can'. 'Was go' mixes past auxiliary with base verb; the correct present-tense expression for habitual action is 'when I go home'. Also 'visualized moments' is awkward; 'visual moments' or 'visually remembered moments' is clearer. Suggestion: read aloud to catch repetitions and use present simple for habitual actions.

× I prefer views in rural areas because I am a fairly traditional person and I find that countryside makes me coming.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I am a fairly traditional person and I find that the countryside makes me calm.

Error: 'makes me coming' is ungrammatical. The student likely intended an effect on feelings; the correct phrasing is 'makes me calm' or 'makes me feel calm'. 'Countryside' as a general noun needs the definite article 'the'. Suggestion: use 'make + object + adjective' (e.g., 'makes me feel relaxed') or 'makes me + adjective' for correct structure.

× For example, when I see the crops in the fields and some farm animals, I will feel very relaxed and feel like I am closer to the nature.

✓ For example, when I see the crops in the fields and some farm animals, I feel very relaxed and feel like I am closer to nature.

Error: mismatch of tense and article use. The clause 'when I see ...' describes a habitual situation, so present simple 'I feel' is preferred over 'I will feel'. Also 'closer to the nature' incorrectly uses the definite article; with general noun 'nature' no article is needed ('closer to nature'). Suggestion: use present simple for habitual reactions and omit 'the' with 'nature'.

× I prefer views in Japan because I think the, uh, Fuji Mountain and other, uh, landscapes are very beautiful and naturally without any business exploration.

✓ I prefer views in Japan because I think Mount Fuji and other landscapes are very beautiful and natural without any commercial development.

Errors: 'the Fuji Mountain' is incorrect name order; use 'Mount Fuji'. 'Natural' should be an adjective paired with landscapes, not adverb 'naturally'. 'Business exploration' is unclear and not idiomatic; 'commercial development' or 'commercialization' fits the intended meaning. Suggestion: learn proper names (Mount Fuji) and choose idiomatic collocations like 'commercial development' or 'commercialization'.