Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản, thì và danh từ số nhiều/số ít; làm câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn; dùng từ vựng chính xác (e.g., “pictures”, “new places”, “preserve”); thêm một câu hỗ trợ cụ thể hơn nếu cần và dùng liên từ hợp lý.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture memories when I travel to new places. For example, I often photograph the city skyline at sunset to preserve the warm colors and the peaceful atmosphere.

Suggestion: Sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự từ; tránh lặp từ và tiếng ậm ừ; nêu rõ lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: cơ hội việc làm, giao thông công cộng, tiện ích) trong 2–3 câu ngắn; dùng liên từ để kết nối ý.

Example: I prefer views in urban areas because cities offer more job opportunities and better public transport. For example, there are many shops, universities and frequent trains, which makes city life more convenient.

Suggestion: Làm rõ ý chính bằng một câu chủ đề; sửa phát âm và từ vựng (e.g., “prefer views in my own country”, “I feel connected to my country”); đưa ví dụ cụ thể và chính xác (tên địa danh đúng: "Lăng Bác", "Hoan Kiem Lake"); tránh lặp và tiếng ậm ừ.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because I feel a strong connection to my homeland. For example, Vietnam has many beautiful places such as Ha Long Bay and Hoan Kiem Lake in Hanoi, which I enjoy visiting.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of different views because it helped me capture moments and memories, especially when I travel to news places.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me capture moments and memories, especially when I travel to new places.

The sentence has several errors: 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' (singular/plural). 'helped' is past tense but the context is general present, so use 'help' (present tense). 'it' is incorrect pronoun for plural 'pictures', use 'they'. 'news' is wrong word; use 'new'. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, match noun number with pronoun, and choose correct vocabulary.

× For example, I often photographed a city skyline Skylands at sunset to reserve the colors and atmosphere.

✓ For example, I often photograph the city skyline, Skylands, at sunset to preserve the colors and atmosphere.

Problems: 'photographed' is past tense but context is habitual so use present 'photograph' (present tense error too). 'a city skyline Skylands' needs the definite article 'the' for a specific skyline, and apposition should be marked with commas. 'reserve' is incorrect verb; 'preserve' is correct. Suggestion: use present simple for regular actions, use 'the' for specific known things, and choose correct verb.

× Actually, I prefer in ur urban area because in urban area have more shop opportunities and universities, for example, uh, the companies are hiring, uh, hiring and uh, making these more trains.

✓ Actually, I prefer urban areas because urban areas have more shopping opportunities and universities; for example, companies are hiring and there are more trains.

Errors: 'prefer in ur urban area' is incorrect preposition and spelling; say 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer the urban area'. Missing subject: 'in urban area have' needs subject 'urban areas have'. 'shop opportunities' should be 'shopping opportunities'. Repetition and filler words removed. 'making these more trains' is ungrammatical; use 'there are more trains' to indicate availability. Suggestion: remove fillers, ensure subject present, use correct prepositions and plural forms.

× I prefer, I prefer ruins my country because my country belong with me.

✓ I prefer my country because my country belongs to me.

Problems: 'I prefer, I prefer ruins my country' is ungrammatical—'ruins' misplaced. Correct structure is 'I prefer my country'. 'belong with me' is incorrect collocation; use 'belongs to me'. Also subject-verb agreement: 'country belongs'. Suggestion: state preference clearly and use correct verb 'belong to'.

× Umm in Viet affordable in Vietnam, we have more views, beautiful views like uh uh, landing being province, especially in in my capital in Hanoi, we have uh Juan Kim.

✓ In Vietnam, we have many beautiful sights, for example the Ninh Binh province; especially in my capital, Hanoi, we have Hoan Kiem Lake.

Errors: 'Viet affordable in Vietnam' is garbled; should be 'In Vietnam'. 'more views, beautiful views' is repetitive; use 'many beautiful sights'. 'landing being province' appears to attempt 'Ninh Binh province' but is incorrect; use correct place names. 'Juan Kim' likely refers to 'Hoan Kiem' (transcription error); use correct name. Prepositions: use 'in Vietnam' and 'in my capital, Hanoi'. Suggestion: use clear noun phrases, correct place names, and proper prepositions.