Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make your answer more coherent and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct repetition and avoid filler words. Also use precise vocabulary (e.g., “landscapes,” “parks,” “gardens,” “on my phone”).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. For example, I often photograph gardens and urban parks when I visit friends, and I usually take these pictures on my phone to share later.

Suggestion: Start with a clear preference and give logical, relevant reasons. Avoid contradicting yourself and reduce fillers (uh, umm). Use accurate vocabulary—if you mean traffic and activity rather than pollution, say so. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” or “however.”

Example: I prefer urban views because the city offers diverse scenes such as busy streets, cafés and modern buildings. These features make city photography more interesting than rural areas, which are often quieter.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer (yes/no) then explain with specific examples. Mention one or two notable places and why they are special for photography. Avoid vague phrases and unclear names; pronounce or write place names clearly. Use linking words like “for example” or “such as.”

Example: I prefer views in my own country because it has iconic landscapes and cultural sites. For example, Mount Everest offers dramatic mountain scenery, and historic temples provide rich cultural details that are great for photos.

× Of course I like different types of of things or in my places so as like a new view as like or or garden area and also park and visiting in my friends and some pictures will be taken in my phone.

✓ Of course I like different types of things and places, such as a new view, a garden area, or a park; I also visit my friends and take some pictures on my phone.

The sentence has multiple preposition and connector errors: 'in my places' should be 'places' without 'in'; 'visiting in my friends' should be 'visit my friends'; 'will be taken in my phone' should be 'take pictures on my phone'. Also remove duplicate words and link items with commas and conjunctions. Use 'on my phone' for device and 'take pictures' active voice for natural speaking. Steps to improve: 1) Remove unnecessary prepositions (drop 'in' before 'places'), 2) use parallel structure for list items, 3) use 'visit my friends' not 'visiting in', 4) use 'take pictures on my phone'.

× Yes, I prefer in uh, urban area because, uh, if there are uh, different types of, of pollution in urban area as like uh, umm, bike, car, bus, No, if there are many types of pollution and uh, uh, very big pollution in our area for umm, factory in Chin e-mail.

✓ Yes, I prefer urban areas because there is more pollution in cities from vehicles such as bikes, cars, and buses, and from factories in China.

Errors include wrong preposition 'prefer in urban area' should be 'prefer urban areas'; 'in urban area' needs plural or article; 'for umm, factory in Chin e-mail' is garbled—should be 'from factories in China'. Use 'there is' for uncountable pollution. Improve clarity by using plural 'areas' and correct prepositions 'in' with locations and 'from' for sources. Suggestions: 1) Say 'prefer urban areas' or 'prefer the urban area', 2) use 'there is' for pollution, 3) use 'from' to indicate source (from vehicles, from factories).

× Yes. So if there are different types of view in our country because it's like Mount Everest and different types of tourist area in our country as we like Mukhini temple. MTF Rest.

✓ Yes. There are many different kinds of views in our country, such as Mount Everest and various tourist sites like Mukhini Temple.

Problems: 'types of view' is awkward—use 'kinds of views' or 'different views'; 'tourist area' should be 'tourist sites' or 'tourist areas'; repetitive 'in our country' removed for conciseness; 'as we like' should be 'such as' to introduce examples. Also fix capitalization and unclear fragment 'MTF Rest' removed or interpreted as 'Mukhini Temple'. Suggestions: 1) Use 'such as' to introduce examples, 2) prefer 'views' plural, 3) use 'tourist sites/areas' and keep sentences concise.