Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition; use a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Reduce filler words and correct minor grammar (e.g., duplicate words, run-on sentence).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of landscapes. For example, I often photograph fields, rivers and mountain scenes when I travel in Canada because I like capturing natural light and the changing seasons.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetitions, and add one clear reason using a linking word. Keep it within 2–4 sentences and provide a specific example.

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer unspoiled natural scenery. For instance, I enjoy photographing wildflower meadows and distant mountains, whereas urban photos tend to focus on buildings and streets.

Suggestion: Answer directly about your preference, then give a concise comparison with specific details. Avoid irrelevant background and informal phrases. Use linking words (e.g., however, whereas, therefore).

Example: I prefer the views in Canada because they are closer to untouched nature. For example, compared with India where I grew up, Canada has more easily accessible mountains and vast forests, so I often find more dramatic landscape photo opportunities here.

× Yes, I do like to to capture the the beautiful things around me like the fields, mountains and rivers and I have come across many places in Canada I love to do so.

✓ Yes, I do like to capture the beautiful things around me, like the fields, mountains, and rivers, and I have come across many places in Canada where I love to do so.

This sentence contains repeated words ('to to' and 'the the') which are typographical/word repetition errors; they do not match a named item exactly in the provided list, but they affect sentence structure (26: Sentence structure errors). Remove duplicate words and add punctuation to separate clauses. Also add 'where' to clarify the relative clause and commas for readability.

× Actually, my preference is always a rural area because, uh, because uh, we can see many, many beautiful views over there, the fields, the, the nature, uh, the flowers and everything.

✓ Actually, my preference is always for rural areas because we can see many beautiful views there: the fields, nature, the flowers, and so on.

Errors include unnecessary articles and singular/plural mismatch (1: Singular and plural issue; 22: Article errors) and filler repetitions. Use 'for rural areas' rather than 'a rural area' to match general preference. Remove repeated fillers and duplicate 'the'. Use 'there' instead of 'over there' for conciseness.

× While in urban areas there are more man made places to take photos of.

✓ In urban areas, there are more man-made places to take photos of.

Add hyphen to 'man-made' (compound adjective) and move 'while' or omit it; here starting the sentence with 'In urban areas' is clearer. Also add a comma after the introductory phrase. This corrects article/structure issues (17: Incorrect use of the definite article; 26: Sentence structure errors).

× I had been living in India since my birth, so I just moved to Canada five years back.

✓ I have been living in India since my birth, but I moved to Canada five years ago.

Using past perfect 'had been living' is incorrect here because the speaker's move is a simple past event; however 'since my birth' suggests a state continuing to present, so use present perfect ('have been living') if still in India, but because the speaker moved, use simple past for the move and 'ago' not 'back'. This addresses tense issues (5: Past tense issue; 6: Present tense issue) and preposition/time expression ('five years ago' is correct).

× And when I came here and I compared everything, the views are more beautiful here and they're like, you know, the Canada, it is more closer to nature as compared to India.

✓ When I came here and compared everything, the views seemed more beautiful; Canada is closer to nature compared to India.

Remove filler 'you know' and awkward 'the Canada'. Use 'seemed' or 'are' consistent with past comparison; 'is more closer' is incorrect because 'more' with comparative 'closer' is redundant. Use 'closer to nature' (13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs; 26: Sentence structure errors).

× So I came across many mountains.

✓ So I have come across many mountains.

'Came across' suggests encountering in the past; if referring to experiences since moving to Canada up to now, present perfect 'have come across' is better. This fixes tense choice (5: Past tense issue; 6: Present tense issue) and matches the conversational context.