Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural, concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words and grammar errors, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I often take photos at the gym to track my fitness progress, and I also photograph new places when I travel to capture scenery and memories. For example, I recently photographed a coastal sunset to compare my progress in composition and lighting.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words. Reduce repetition and correct collocations (e.g., 'open spaces', 'local cuisine'). Keep sentences simple and coherent.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and have wide open spaces for activities. For instance, I enjoy hiking on quiet trails and trying local cuisine at village markets, which gives me a more relaxed and authentic experience.

Suggestion: Be concise and avoid fillers. State your preference clearly, give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, so, for example) correctly and avoid vague phrases like 'adapt their things'.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because I get bored with familiar surroundings and enjoy new experiences. For example, visiting Japan allowed me to photograph traditional temples and unique street scenes, which inspired me to try new photography techniques.

× I am heavily A photogenic person.

✓ I am a very photogenic person.

'Heavily' is an adverb that does not collocate with 'photogenic.' Use 'very' to modify the adjective 'photogenic.' Also remove the stray capitalized 'A' and place the article 'a' correctly: 'a very photogenic person.' Suggestion: Use common adverb-adjective collocations (very, quite, extremely) with descriptive adjectives.

× Uh, mostly I took pictures at uh, my gym because whenever I flex, I want to record that how much cuts I have so I can have my progress.

✓ Mostly I take pictures at my gym because whenever I flex, I want to record how much definition I have so I can track my progress.

The sentence mixes past tense 'took' with present habitual context 'whenever I flex, I want.' Use present simple 'take' for habitual actions. 'How much cuts' is ungrammatical; use 'how much definition' or 'how cut' is informal—'definition' is clearer. 'Have my progress' is incorrect; use 'track my progress.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent for habitual actions (present simple) and use correct collocations like 'track progress.'

× Moreover, uh, I also like to visit more and more places by which I can explore.

✓ Moreover, I also like to visit more and more places where I can explore.

'By which' is awkward and incorrect here. Use 'where' to refer to places in which you can explore. Also remove filler words 'uh' and redundant 'more and more' if unnecessary. Suggestion: Use 'where' after 'places' to indicate location or context.

× My preference is toward rural areas because these areas are quite calm and have a lot of empty areas by which we can do a lot of activities there.

✓ My preference is for rural areas because they are quite calm and have a lot of open space where we can do many activities.

Use 'preference is for' rather than 'toward' in this context. 'Empty areas' is better as 'open space.' 'By which' is incorrect; use 'where.' Remove redundant 'there.' Also use 'many activities' (quantifier) instead of 'a lot of activities' for variety. Suggestion: Use 'preference for' and 'where' when referring to places, and prefer 'open space' for natural areas.

× And moreover, we can have a lot of things to do by which we can enjoy our our time and have a lot of cuisines there.

✓ Moreover, there are many things to do where we can enjoy our time and try a variety of cuisines.

Sentence repeats 'our' and uses 'by which' and 'there' incorrectly. Use 'there are many things to do' or 'where we can enjoy our time.' 'Have a lot of cuisines' is incorrect; say 'try a variety of cuisines.' Suggestion: Avoid repetition, and use 'try' with 'cuisines' or 'enjoy different cuisines.'

× I believe my preference is toward the other countries because I'm a kind of person who used to get bored easily, so I need a different taste.

✓ I believe I prefer other countries because I'm the kind of person who gets bored easily, so I need different experiences.

Use 'prefer' for a simple present preference. 'Toward the other countries' is awkward—say 'other countries.' 'Used to get bored' implies a past habit; use 'gets bored' for a general truth. 'A different taste' is vague; 'different experiences' fits better. Suggestion: Use present simple for general preferences and 'the kind of person who + present simple' for habitual tendencies.

× So, uh, I need to go at different places and capture the different memories and cultures and adapt their things in my life and uh, uh, for example.

✓ So I need to go to different places, capture different memories and cultures, and adopt some of their customs in my life, for example.

Use 'go to' not 'go at.' 'Capture the different memories' should be 'capture different memories.' 'Adapt their things in my life' is unnatural; use 'adopt some of their customs' or 'incorporate aspects of their culture into my life.' Remove filler 'uh' and trailing 'for example' unless you provide an example. Suggestion: Use 'go to' for visiting places, 'adopt' for taking on customs, and avoid filler words. Provide a concrete example if you say 'for example.'