Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is positive and relevant with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, but it is slightly long and repetitive (“taking pictures” repeated). To improve, make the response more concise, avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail or example to show authenticity (e.g., a favorite subject or recent shot). Use a linking word if you add a second idea.

Example: Yes, I do. Photography is one of my hobbies, and I especially enjoy capturing buildings and natural landscapes. For example, last month I photographed an old colonial house at sunset, which highlighted the textures and warm light.

Suggestion: Your answer gives a clear preference but has grammar errors, repetition, and an irrelevant fragment at the end. Improve by correcting grammar (plural/singular and verb forms), removing the unrelated question, and adding a specific reason or short example using a linking word to connect ideas.

Example: I prefer rural areas because they let me explore natural landscapes and traditional buildings. For example, I enjoy photographing village cottages and winding lanes, which often have unique textures and local character.

Suggestion: The answer is unclear and contains inappropriate word choice (“boss”) and many hesitations and grammatical mistakes. To improve, state a clear preference, remove filler words, correct grammar, and give a concise specific example or reason (use linking words like “because” or “for example”). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I prefer taking photos in my own country because it offers a wide variety of landscapes and architecture. For instance, I’ve photographed mountains, coastal towns, and historic city centres, which gives me plenty of creative opportunities.

× Yes I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Missing comma after introductory 'Yes' is a punctuation issue tied to sentence flow rather than grammar list categories; insert comma to follow natural spoken/written conventions and improve clarity.

× Photography is one of my hobbies and I'm really fascinated by taking photos of buildings and nature, so definitely I love taking pictures of different views.

✓ Photography is one of my hobbies and I'm really fascinated by photographing buildings and nature, so I definitely love taking pictures of different views.

Use of 'fascinated by taking photos' is acceptable but 'fascinated by photographing' is more concise and idiomatic. Also place 'definitely' before the verb 'love' for natural adverb placement. Suggestion: use noun/gerund forms correctly and position adverbs near the verb they modify.

× For me rural areas are the best, I get to explore the nature and also some authentic buildings.

✓ For me, rural areas are the best; I get to explore nature and also some authentic buildings.

Remove the definite article before 'nature' because 'nature' as a general concept usually does not take 'the'. Add comma after introductory phrase and use a semicolon (or period) to separate two independent clauses. This fixes article misuse and punctuation linking of clauses.

× To me rural areas has an identity.

✓ To me, rural areas have an identity.

Subject 'rural areas' is plural, so the verb must be 'have' not 'has'. Add comma after introductory phrase for clarity.

× So where are you while taking pictures? You just not just capturing the moment but you capturing.

✓ So where are you while taking pictures? You are not just capturing the moment, but you are capturing the atmosphere/feeling as well.

Original contains punctuation and repeated 'just' and missing auxiliary 'are' before 'capturing'. Corrected version adds the missing auxiliary verb for present continuous and clarifies the second object (atmosphere/feeling) to complete the idea. Also fix repetition 'just not just' to 'not just'.

× Actually, I prefer boss.

✓ Actually, I prefer my own country.

The student likely intended to say 'my country' or 'my own country'; 'boss' is out of context. Replace with meaningful phrase to fit the question. This is a content correction to restore sentence sense.

× I have been through many parts of my country taking photos and capturing moments, lands and buildings and, uh, I get also to travel, uh, to many places as well.

✓ I have been to many parts of my country, taking photos and capturing moments, landscapes and buildings, and I have also traveled to many places as well.

Use 'been to' rather than 'been through' for visiting regions. 'Lands' is awkward; 'landscapes' is more appropriate. Combine tenses consistently: present perfect 'I have been' and 'I have also traveled' are parallel. Move 'also' to natural position and remove filler 'uh'.

× So that's also was, uh, benefit for me.

✓ So that was also a benefit for me.

Original mixes present and past ('that's' and 'was'); choose past 'that was' for consistency. Include the article 'a' before 'benefit'. Remove filler 'uh'.