Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitation and repeat words (e.g., "the pictures, the pictures"). Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "angles," "perspectives") and use a linking word such as "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because changing angles makes images more interesting and tells a story. For example, shooting from a low angle can make a building look dramatic, while a wide shot of a landscape shows scale and atmosphere.

Suggestion: Improve grammatical accuracy and clarity. Begin with a direct topic sentence ("I prefer rural views"), then give specific reasons using linking words (e.g., "because," "for example"). Correct verb forms and article use ("I live," "the place where I was born," "rural areas"). Keep to 2–3 sentences maximum.

Example: I prefer rural views because they feel very different from the city where I live. For example, the green fields and quiet villages give my photos a unique, peaceful atmosphere that I can't find in urban streets.

Suggestion: Make your answer more fluent and grammatically correct. Answer directly ("I prefer views in my own country") then give a specific reason and an example. Avoid filler words ("uh"), plural/singular errors ("Indonesia has"), and vague phrases ("turn around Indonesia"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

Example: I prefer views in my own country because Indonesia has many beautiful natural sites. For example, the beaches and rice terraces offer varied backdrops for photos, so I enjoy exploring them to capture unique images.

× I feel like I have a hobby to photograph things.

✓ I feel like I have a hobby of photographing things.

Use of the present participle (verb + -ing) after 'hobby of' is correct; 'hobby to photograph' is unnatural. Use 'photographing' to express the ongoing activity and 'hobby of' as the common collocation. Suggestion: Say 'a hobby of photographing things' or 'a hobby: taking photographs.'

× I do love taking pictures from different views because it makes the pictures, the pictures much more fun and adventurous and not boring.

✓ I do love taking pictures from different viewpoints because it makes the pictures much more fun and adventurous rather than boring.

Use 'taking' (present participle) is correct; the sentence needed correction of noun phrase 'views' to 'viewpoints' and redundancy removal. Also replace 'not boring' with 'rather than boring' for smoother comparison. Suggestion: Use 'different viewpoints' and avoid repeating 'the pictures.'

× And you can see the different point of view of it and you can tell there's a story in it.

✓ And you can see a different point of view, and you can tell there is a story in it.

Use 'seeing' is implied; replace 'the different point of view of it' with 'a different point of view' for natural phrasing and singular agreement. Also expand contraction for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'a different point of view' or 'different points of view.'

× As a person who live in urban areas, I prefer to see a rural areas because I feel like it's much more different from the place that I've born and I feel like it's going to be much more unique for my photograph.

✓ As a person who lives in an urban area, I prefer to see rural areas because I feel they are very different from the place where I was born and I think they will be more unique for my photographs.

Multiple pronoun and agreement issues: 'who live' should be 'who lives' (subject-verb agreement), 'an urban area' instead of plural, 'a rural areas' incorrect article-number agreement, 'the place that I've born' is wrong verb form and structure — use 'where I was born' (past passive). 'It's going to be' vague; use 'they will be' to agree with 'rural areas.' Also 'photograph' should be plural or 'photography.' Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and correct use of relative clauses and past tense ('was born').

× So I prefer something like rural areas because it's much more green and much more peaceful rather than the urban areas.

✓ So I prefer rural areas because they are much greener and much more peaceful than urban areas.

Pronoun 'it' does not agree with plural 'rural areas' — use 'they are.' Adjective 'green' should be comparative 'greener' when comparing. Remove unnecessary article before 'urban areas.' Suggestion: Match pronouns and use comparative adjectives for comparisons.

× I prefer views in my own country, but it doesn't mean that I hate the other countries.

✓ I prefer views in my own country, but that does not mean I hate other countries.

Use 'that does not mean' is more natural; 'the other countries' is unnecessary definite article — use 'other countries.' Suggestion: Omit 'the' when speaking generally about other countries.

× But in my opinion, Indonesia, they had a lot of natural things and good places for pictures.

✓ But in my opinion, Indonesia has a lot of natural attractions and good places for photos.

Avoid using both the country name and the pronoun 'they' together. Use present tense 'has' for general truth. 'Natural things' is vague; 'natural attractions' is clearer, and 'photos' is more natural than 'pictures' in this context. Suggestion: Use the country name alone with a singular verb and choose precise nouns like 'attractions' and 'photos.'

× So I feel like I really want to, uh, turn around Indonesia and have a good photograph because Indonesia are a great place.

✓ So I feel like I really want to travel around Indonesia and take good photographs because Indonesia is a great place.

Multiple grammar issues: 'turn around Indonesia' is incorrect verb choice — use 'travel around.' 'Have a good photograph' is awkward; use 'take good photographs.' 'Indonesia are' is subject-verb agreement error — use 'Indonesia is.' Suggestion: Use correct verbs ('travel around,' 'take photographs') and ensure subject-verb agreement with country names.