Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant and expressive, but it is slightly wordy and has some redundancy (e.g., “for me to relive them later and go back to the happy times” repeats the same idea). To improve, make the response more concise with a clear topic sentence followed by one specific supporting detail. Use a linking word if you add an extra point.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing different views because they offer a refreshing change from my everyday scenery. For example, when I take landscape photos on trips, I can look back at them and remember the exact atmosphere and mood of that day.

Suggestion: The answer states a clear preference but contains hesitation (“uh”) and a vague phrase (“Metropolitan”). Improve by removing fillers, using precise vocabulary, and adding one concrete detail or example to justify the preference. Keep it to two or three sentences.

Example: I prefer urban views because the modern skyline and tall skyscrapers appeal to me. For instance, I enjoy photographing city lights at night since they create dramatic contrasts and remind me of the busy neighborhood where I grew up.

Suggestion: Your idea is good, but the answer has repetition (“because they are because due to”) and could be more specific. Remove repeated phrases, use clearer linking words, and give one concrete example of a type of view you enjoy abroad. Limit to two or three sentences.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because the landscapes are often very different from what I’m used to. For example, I loved seeing the dramatic fjords in Norway, which were completely unlike the flat coastal scenery at home.

× Yes, because they are a refreshing breath from my usual scenery and taking pictures can help me record these beautiful memories for me to relive them later and go back to the happy times the pictures involve.

✓ Yes, because they are a refreshing change from my usual scenery, and taking pictures helps me record these beautiful memories so I can relive them later and return to the happy times the pictures show.

Errors: 'refreshing breath' is an unusual collocation; 'taking pictures can help me record these beautiful memories for me to relive them later and go back to the happy times the pictures involve' is wordy and has awkward verb forms. 'Taking pictures helps me record' uses subject-verb agreement with the gerund subject 'taking pictures' (singular), so use 'helps' not 'can help' or keep but 'helps' is tighter. 'For me to relive them later and go back to the happy times the pictures involve' is unidiomatic; use 'so I can relive them later and return to the happy times the pictures show.' Suggestions: use natural collocations ('refreshing change'), keep gerund subjects matched with singular verbs, simplify sentence structure and replace awkward verbs like 'involve' with 'show' or 'depict'.

× Urban areas because the skyline and skyscrapers of, uh, big cities are really modern and beautiful.

✓ I prefer urban areas because the skylines and skyscrapers of big cities are modern and beautiful.

Errors: sentence fragment (missing subject 'I prefer') and plural agreement: 'skyline' should be 'skylines' to match 'skyscrapers' or keep singular with article. Also filler 'uh' unnecessary. Suggestions: include the subject 'I prefer' to form a complete sentence and ensure consistent plural forms ('skylines and skyscrapers').

× Also, the bustling streets of Metropolitan are really close to my own personal life, making me feel more comfortable and at home.

✓ Also, the bustling streets of the metropolis are very similar to my daily life, which makes me feel more comfortable and at home.

Errors: 'Metropolitan' is an adjective; the intended noun is 'metropolis' or 'metropolitan areas.' 'Close to my own personal life' is unidiomatic; use 'similar to my daily life.' 'Really' is acceptable but 'very' fits better here. Suggestions: use correct noun forms ('metropolis' or 'metropolitan areas'), prefer natural expressions ('similar to my daily life'), and connect clauses with 'which' to show cause-effect clearly.

× I prefer views in other countries because they are because due to geographical reasons, the views in other countries are actually quite different and it's like a breath of fresh air to me.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because, for geographical reasons, they are quite different and feel like a breath of fresh air to me.

Errors: redundant words ('are because due to') create confusion; 'for geographical reasons' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also repeated 'the views in other countries' is redundant. Suggestions: remove redundancy, use 'for' with 'geographical reasons,' and simplify the sentence to avoid repetition.

× I'm able to see lots of beautiful scenery which take my breath away and those I can't see in my own country.

✓ I'm able to see lots of beautiful scenery that takes my breath away and that I can't see in my own country.

Errors: subject-verb agreement: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and takes singular verb 'takes,' not 'take.' Also relative clauses need consistent wording: use 'that' for things and repeat 'that' or restructure. 'Those' incorrectly refers to 'scenery' (uncountable) — use 'that I can't see.' Suggestions: treat 'scenery' as singular/uncountable with singular verbs, use 'that' for restrictive relative clauses, and avoid using 'those' to refer to uncountable nouns.