Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản và sự mạch lạc: sửa các lỗi về động từ, giới từ và trật tự từ; viết câu ngắn gọn hơn để tự nhiên (tối đa 5 câu). Thêm liên từ hợp lý để nối ý và cung cấp lý do cụ thể hơn về cảm xúc và hoàn cảnh chụp ảnh (ví dụ khi nào, ở đâu, bạn cảm thấy sao). Luyện phát âm và giảm tiếng lắp để câu trôi chảy.

Example: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax and clear my mind after school. For example, I often photograph the city skyline at sunset near my house, which gives me a sense of calm. Taking pictures also makes me notice small details in a landscape that I would otherwise miss.

Suggestion: Tập trung vào tính mạch lạc và lựa chọn từ chính xác: tránh lẫn lộn “urban” và “rural” trong cùng một câu; sửa lỗi từ vựng và cấu trúc (ví dụ “quiet countryside”, “watching a sunset over fields”). Dùng liên từ để giải thích rõ lý do, và đưa một ví dụ cụ thể, ngắn gọn, có liên quan. Giảm lỗi phát âm và ngắt câu hợp lý.

Example: I prefer rural views because they offer tranquility and natural beauty, like rolling hills and open fields. For example, I enjoy walking through the quiet countryside and watching the sunset over the fields, which helps me relax after a busy week in the city.

Suggestion: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng, dùng câu rõ ràng: tránh cụm từ mơ hồ như “old country” và “secondary approach”; nói rõ là “my own country” và “other countries”. Giải thích cụ thể vì sao cảnh ở trong nước có ý nghĩa (ví dụ kỷ niệm, lễ hội) và nêu một đặc điểm cụ thể bạn thích ở nước ngoài (ví dụ kiến trúc khác lạ). Giữ câu ngắn, rõ ràng và dùng liên từ so sánh.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because they are linked to familiar memories and cultural events, such as local festivals and family trips, which make the landscapes more meaningful. However, I also appreciate views in other countries because their different architectural styles and novel scenery can be very inspiring.

× Absolutely yes, I very like taking picture of different views because I can see more a landscape and it made me clear my mind and I fresh uh after go to school.

✓ Absolutely yes, I really like taking pictures of different views because I can see more of a landscape, and it clears my mind and makes me feel refreshed after going to school.

The sentence uses 'very' incorrectly with the verb 'like' (use adverb 'really'). 'Taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures'. 'See more a landscape' needs preposition 'of' and article 'a'. 'It made me clear my mind' should be present simple 'it clears my mind' to match habitual action; use 'makes me feel refreshed' not 'I fresh'. 'After go to school' needs gerund 'after going to school'. Suggestions: replace 'very' with 'really', pluralize nouns, add necessary prepositions/articles, use correct verb forms and gerunds to express habitual actions.

× I prefer rural views because they offer tranquility and natural beauty such as rolling hills and urban feel will help me relax after a busy week in the city.

✓ I prefer rural views because they offer tranquility and natural beauty, such as rolling hills, which help me relax after a busy week in the city.

The original sentence runs two clauses together without proper connector; 'urban feel' conflicts with 'rural views'. Use a relative clause 'which help me relax' to link the examples to the main clause. Also add commas and plural agreement 'help' to match plural 'rolling hills'. Suggestion: restructure to use 'such as' followed by examples and a relative clause to show the effect.

× For example, walking along or quit country land or watching a sunset over family feel restorative.

✓ For example, walking along quiet countryside paths or watching a sunset with family feels restorative.

Multiple issues in sentence structure: 'quit' should be 'quiet'; 'country land' is awkward — use 'countryside paths' or 'the countryside'; 'watching a sunset over family' is incorrect preposition and noun order — use 'with family'. The subject is a gerund phrase (walking or watching) which is considered singular, so the verb should be 'feels'. Suggestion: choose natural collocations ('quiet countryside', 'with family') and ensure verb agrees with compound gerund subject (use singular verb if seen as single experience).

× I prefer view in in my old country because they of familiar memories and cultural connection such as local festival and family trip that make landscape more meaningful.

✓ I prefer views in my home country because they are familiar memories and cultural connections, such as local festivals and family trips, that make the landscape more meaningful.

Errors: 'view' should be plural 'views'; double 'in in' removes one; 'old country' is unnatural here — use 'home country' or 'my country of origin'; 'they of familiar memories' is ungrammatical — needs 'they are' or better rephrase; 'cultural connection' should be plural to match; 'local festival' and 'family trip' should be plural when referring generally. Also add article 'the' before 'landscape'. Suggestion: use correct articles, plural forms for general statements, and natural collocations ('home country', 'local festivals').

× However, I also enjoy secondary approach for its novelty and different architect style.

✓ However, I also enjoy visiting other countries for their novelty and different architectural styles.

Problems: 'secondary approach' is unclear; likely meant 'other countries' or 'a secondary option'. 'Architect style' should be 'architectural style' and plural 'styles' to match 'different'. Use 'visiting' to indicate preference. Suggestion: choose clear noun phrases ('other countries'), use correct adjective form 'architectural', and ensure plural agreement.