Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve fluency and conciseness: start directly, avoid filler phrases like 'Truly speaking' and repeated 'so'. Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word. Also correct small grammar: 'residing in Canada' is fine but 'there are many historic monuments and scenic views' is more natural.

Example: I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, since I live in Canada, I often photograph historic monuments and scenic landscapes to preserve memories.

Suggestion: Work on accuracy, reduce hesitation and improve cohesion: remove fillers ('Truly speaking', 'uh'). Use plural/singular correctly ('rural areas', 'rural areas are natural') and a linking word to connect reason. Make sentence shorter and specific by giving one concrete example.

Example: I prefer views in rural areas because the scenery is more natural and peaceful; for instance, I like photographing rolling fields and old stone cottages that you rarely see in cities.

Suggestion: Focus on clarity, grammar and concise reasons: avoid 'according to my opinion' and many hesitations. Use clear grammar ('my country' singular) and give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to structure your answer.

Example: I prefer taking pictures in other countries because they often have more historical landmarks than my country. For example, when I travel abroad I enjoy photographing centuries-old cathedrals and ancient ruins that I don't find at home.

× Truly speaking, I love to take pictures of different views because now I'm residing in Canada, so there are so many beautiful historic monuments and scenic views around me, so I love to take pictures and make memories.

✓ Truly speaking, I love taking pictures of different views because I am currently living in Canada, so there are many beautiful historic monuments and scenic views around me; I love taking pictures to make memories.

Present tense consistency and gerund use: 'love to take pictures' is acceptable but repeating 'I love to take pictures' is redundant; using the gerund 'loving taking' variant 'love taking' is more natural. 'Now I'm residing' is wordy; 'I am currently living' fits present continuous. Remove repeated 'so' and combine clauses for clarity. Use 'many' instead of 'so many' twice to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: use consistent present tense and gerunds for habits ('I love taking photos') and concise adverb phrases ('currently living').

× Truly speaking, I prefer to take view uh pictures in rural area because in rural area the view is uh natural, so we can directly linked to the natural beauty and we can enjoy the monuments around me.

✓ Truly speaking, I prefer to take pictures of views in rural areas because the views in rural areas are natural, so we can be directly connected to the natural beauty and enjoy the monuments around us.

Plural and count noun use: 'view pictures' is incorrect — use 'pictures of views' or 'view pictures' rearranged. Use plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally. 'the view is natural' should be plural 'the views are natural'. Verb form and pronoun: 'we can directly linked' is wrong form — use passive 'be directly connected' or active 'be linked' with correct verb form. 'around me' should be 'around us' when using 'we'. Suggest using plural nouns for general statements and correct verb forms ('be connected') and consistent pronouns.

× According to my opinion, I prefer to, uh, take pictures in other countries because in my countries, uh, like the views or the pictures or the monuments are not that much, not that much historical places.

✓ In my opinion, I prefer to take pictures in other countries because in my country there are not many historical sites or notable monuments.

Pronoun and noun number: 'According to my opinion' is unnatural; use 'In my opinion'. 'my countries' is incorrect when referring to one country — use 'my country'. 'not that much' is uncountable phrasing; for countable nouns use 'not many'. 'historical places' is better as 'historical sites' or 'notable monuments'. Suggest simplifying the phrase and using correct singular/plural forms and appropriate quantifiers ('many' for countable nouns).

× And in other countries, I have searched all a lot and I came to know that, uh, there are so many historical monuments, so I have to, uh, take views.

✓ And in other countries, I have researched a lot and discovered that there are many historical monuments, so I want to photograph them.

Tense and word choice: 'I have searched all a lot' is incorrect wording; use 'I have researched a lot' or 'I have searched a lot'. 'I came to know that' is awkward; prefer present perfect 'I have discovered that' to show recent learning. 'So I have to, uh, take views' misuses 'have to' (necessity) and 'take views' is unnatural — use 'I want to photograph them' to express preference. Suggest using correct phrasal verbs and present perfect for recent findings and 'photograph' or 'take pictures' as clear verbs.