Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Та илэрхий илүү тод, логик хэлбэрээр хариулж дадлага хийх хэрэгтэй. Эхлээд шууд асуултад хариулж (иймэрхүү: “Yes, I do.”), дараа нь 1–2 дэмжих өгүүлбэрээр тайлбарлаж, холбоглогч үг ашиглан санаагаа цэгцтэй дамжуулна. Маяг: богино, тод үг хэллэг, баримт жишээ эсвэл нэг шалтгаан оруулна. Мөн удаан яриад “uh” гэх мэт дүүргэч үгсийг багасгахыг хичээгээрэй.

Example: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking pictures of different views because each viewpoint creates a unique composition. For example, changing my angle can highlight interesting shapes or lighting, which makes the photo more attractive.

Suggestion: Та сайн эхэлсэн тул логик байдал, нарийвчилсан дэлгэрэнгүйг цааш сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Холбоглогч үгнүүд (for example, however, because) сайн ашиглажээ. Цөөн нэг хоёр өгүүлбэр нэмээд илүү тод жишээ эсвэл харьцуулалт оруулаарай. Мөн “metropolitan city” оронд “a big city” эсвэл “metropolis” гэх мэт энгийн, зөв цэвэр үг хэрэглээрэй.

Example: I prefer the countryside to big cities because the rich colors and peaceful scenery help me relax. For example, I love walking among green hills and forests and breathing fresh air, while in a big city I usually hear traffic noise and feel rushed.

Suggestion: Хариулт нь ойлгомжтой боловч нөхцөлтэй бүтэц (conditional) буруу ашигласан байна. Эхлээд шууд хариулж, дараа нөхцөл өгч болно. Мөн тодорхой шалтгаан, жишээ оруулж, холбоос үгийг ашиглаарай. Үг хэллэгийг энгийн, зөв дүрмээр (If I had a chance, I would… эсвэл If I get a chance, I will…) хэрэглэнэ.

Example: I would prefer to visit other countries if I had the chance because I want to photograph new cultures and landscapes. For example, taking photos of foreign architecture and street scenes would give me fresh perspectives that I haven't seen at home.

× It is when it's in different views, it looks like I'm doing other poses and, uh, other poses and looks better in some angle, some of you and I like.

✓ When I take pictures from different angles, it looks like I am making different poses, and some angles look better, which I like.

The original sentence has multiple structural and verb-form issues. 'It is when it's in different views' is unclear and awkward; use a gerund clause or time clause such as 'When I take pictures from different angles'. 'I'm doing other poses' is acceptable but repeating 'other poses' is redundant, so combine ideas. 'Looks better in some angle' is incorrect: use plural 'angles' and structure 'some angles look better'. The sentence needed present continuous and simple present forms consistent: 'I am making different poses' (present continuous) and 'some angles look better' (simple present). Suggestion: simplify and separate ideas into clear clauses, use correct noun number (angle -> angles), and avoid repetition.

× I prefer the countryside to big cities because the rich colors and peaceful scenery of rural areas relax me.

✓ I prefer the countryside to big cities because the rich colors and the peaceful scenery of rural areas relax me.

The phrase 'peaceful scenery' refers to a specific quality and benefits from a definite article 'the' when contrasted with 'rich colors'; adding 'the' makes the parallel structure clearer: 'the rich colors and the peaceful scenery'. This improves cohesion. Also sentence otherwise grammatically fine; ensure consistent article use in parallel noun phrases.

× For example, I enjoy seeing green hills and forests and breathing fresh air, which feels much more restorative than the busiest streets of metropolitan city.

✓ For example, I enjoy seeing green hills and forests and breathing fresh air, which feels much more restorative than the busiest streets of a metropolitan city.

The phrase 'metropolitan city' usually requires an article: 'a metropolitan city' or better 'a big city' or 'the city'. Omitting 'a' made the comparison ungrammatical. Also 'which feels' refers to 'breathing fresh air' (singular idea), so 'feels' is acceptable; keep that. Suggest using 'a metropolitan city' or 'the city' to correct article usage and clarity.

× If I would have a chance to visit the other countries, then I would prefer to travel abroad and take different types of photos because I have already traveled around in my country and explored many different places.

✓ If I had the chance to visit other countries, I would prefer to travel abroad and take different kinds of photos because I have already traveled around my country and explored many different places.

Conditional sentences of the second type require the past simple in the if-clause: 'If I had the chance...' rather than 'If I would have a chance...'. Also use 'other countries' without 'the' for general reference. 'Different types of photos' is better expressed as 'different kinds of photos'. 'Traveled around in my country' should be 'traveled around my country' (remove unnecessary preposition). Suggest using standard second conditional structure: if + past simple, would + base verb.