Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce fillers and redundancy, give a clearer topic sentence and one specific supporting detail. Use one linking word if needed. Focus on natural phrasing (e.g., avoid repeating 'take pictures' and 'pictures').

Example: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I go hiking I always bring my camera to capture mountain ridges and sunrise colours, because I love preserving the atmosphere of a place.

Suggestion: Remove hesitations and repetition. Start with a clear preference sentence, then add two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'because' or 'for example'). Mention why you prefer rural views to show reasoning.

Example: I prefer rural views because I grew up in the countryside. For example, I enjoy photographing mountains and rivers since their changing light and natural textures create more interesting photos than city scenes.

Suggestion: Correct grammar and avoid vague or incorrect place names. Give a concise reason and a specific example. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for instance' to connect the reason and the example.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different architectures and landscapes. For instance, when I visited Florence and Pisa in Italy, I was amazed by the historic cityscapes and the way light fell on the old buildings, which inspired me to take many photos.

× I bring my cameras and take some pictures of different landscapes and natural things.

✓ I bring my camera and take some pictures of different landscapes and natural things.

The noun 'camera' is usually singular when referring to the device a person carries; using the plural 'cameras' implies carrying multiple devices which is unlikely here. Use singular 'camera' for clarity and naturalness. Suggestion: use 'camera' unless you really mean more than one device.

× Umm, actually my hometown is rural areas, so I love to photograph, umm, beautiful scenery, beautiful natural scenery and natural landscapes, Mountains, rivers and beaches.

✓ Umm, actually my hometown is a rural area, so I love to photograph beautiful scenery and natural landscapes, mountains, rivers and beaches.

'Hometown' should be followed by a singular noun phrase 'a rural area' not the plural 'rural areas'. Also capitalization of 'Mountains' is incorrect mid-sentence. Remove redundancy ('beautiful scenery' and 'beautiful natural scenery') and combine lists with commas. Suggestion: use 'a rural area' and lowercase common nouns.

× When I visited Italy, Lome and Florence and Pisa, I really shocked about their beautiful landscapes and unbelievable scenery.

✓ When I visited Italy, Rome, Florence and Pisa, I was really shocked by their beautiful landscapes and unbelievable scenery.

The verb 'shocked' requires an appropriate auxiliary to form the passive or a linking verb form. Use 'was shocked' (past tense passive) plus preposition 'by' to indicate the cause. Also 'Lome' seems incorrect for Rome (city name); ensure correct proper nouns. Suggestion: use 'I was really shocked by...' to express emotional reaction to something.