Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + short reason), avoid hesitation sounds (“umm”, “uh”) and unnecessary questions, and add one specific supporting detail. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me remember details of places. For example, when I visit a park I photograph the layout and colors so I can recall the experience later.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence indicating preference, then provide specific reasons using linking words (for example, because/so). Remove repetition and filler words, and include at most two supporting details (e.g., atmosphere, activities).

Example: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and less crowded. For example, I often go to the countryside at weekends to walk on quiet trails and enjoy wide open views, which helps me unwind.

Suggestion: Answer the question directly (state preference), then support with a specific example and correct verb tense. Avoid fragmented sentences and fillers. Use linking words (for instance, for example, because) and descriptive vocabulary to make the picture clearer.

Example: I prefer views in other countries, especially the British countryside, because they feel charming and different. For example, last summer I visited the UK and enjoyed scenes of stone cottages, rolling green fields and grazing cows, which made a strong impression on me.

× If I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me umm see the entire appearance of the objects, umm will I take the pictures? I can remember the details of this so I like it.

✓ I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me see the entire appearance of objects, and I can remember the details, so I like it.

The original contains incorrect question structure and redundancy. The phrase 'If I enjoy... will I take the pictures?' wrongly forms a question (Sentence structure error). Remove the conditional/question format and combine ideas into a single declarative sentence. Also remove filler sounds 'umm' and the unnecessary article 'the' before 'objects' when speaking generally. Use 'and' to connect related clauses for clarity.

× Well, I tend to choose rural, rural areas because rural areas give me a sense of peace and I enjoy going to the countryside at weekends in, at weekends, uh, which give me, uh, which help me relax my body and, uh, relax my eyes.

✓ Well, I tend to choose rural areas because they give me a sense of peace, and I enjoy going to the countryside at weekends, which helps me relax my body and my eyes.

The phrase 'at weekends in, at weekends' is redundant and word order is wrong (Incorrect use of prepositions). Use 'at weekends' once. 'Which give me' should agree with singular idea 'going to the countryside' or with plural 'areas'—here 'which helps me' refers to the activity, so use singular 'helps'. Also remove repeated words and fillers and add 'my' before 'eyes' for clarity.

× Well, I prefer the rural areas in UK. I will last summer vacation. I travel to the United Kingdom and I saw the beautiful views of the countryside and there are lots of cottage and a big grass and the umm cows and they're really beautiful.

✓ Well, I prefer rural areas in the UK. Last summer vacation I travelled to the United Kingdom and saw the beautiful views of the countryside; there were lots of cottages, large grassy fields, and cows, and they were really beautiful.

Multiple errors: 'in UK' needs article 'the' (Article error) and 'I will last summer vacation' is incorrect tense and form (Past tense issue). Use past tense 'traveled/travelled' and 'saw'. 'There are lots of cottage' has plural/singular mismatch and article errors—use 'cottages'. 'a big grass' is uncountable; use 'large grassy fields' or 'a big field of grass'. Also change 'they're really beautiful' to past 'they were really beautiful' to match past tense of the trip. The correction consolidates these fixes, ensures subject-verb agreement, correct plural forms, and consistent past tense.