Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct tense, reduce filler words (uh, um), and use one or two clear supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a specific example. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photos help me remember special moments and beautiful scenery. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach so I can recall the colours and atmosphere later.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Remove disfluencies and avoid vague phrases like “capture me.” Use linking words such as “because” and “for example.”

Example: I prefer rural views because I love natural landscapes and quiet surroundings. For example, mountains and forests interest me since they offer fresh air and peaceful walking paths.

Suggestion: Use consistent pronouns and concise sentences. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting points and a short linking phrase. Avoid repetition and filler words.

Example: I prefer views in my own country because the countryside is peaceful and largely unspoiled. For example, the rolling hills and fresh air remind me of home and help me relax after a busy week.

× Yes, I really enjoyed taking pictures of different views because photographs, uh, help me capture and remember social moments and beautiful scenery later, uh, when I miss those places, I can look at the photos, truly like the experience.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views because photographs help me capture and remember social moments and beautiful scenery; later, when I miss those places, I can look at the photos and relive the experience.

The student mixed past tense 'enjoyed' with present-tense context. The question asks about a general preference/habit, which requires the present simple 'enjoy'. Also some sentence fragments and lack of proper connectors: use a semicolon or conjunction and replace 'truly like the experience' with 'relive the experience' for clarity and correct idiomatic usage. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for habits and combine clauses with 'and' or punctuation to form complete sentences.

× I prefer rural areas. I really like nature and, uh, seeing the, uh, scenery, uh, among, uh, mountains or uh, trees for me, it's really, uh, fascinating, umm. Capture me.

✓ I prefer rural areas. I really like nature and scenery among mountains and trees; for me, it is really fascinating.

The original contains disfluent filler words and fragmented clauses ('Capture me' is a fragment and unclear). Also punctuation and clause boundaries are incorrect. Remove fillers, replace 'it's' with 'it is' for formality, and join ideas with a semicolon or conjunction. 'Capture me' is not grammatically appropriate—likely intended meaning was that the scenery captures my attention, but simply stating 'it is really fascinating' is clearer. Suggestion: remove fillers, ensure each sentence has subject and verb, and avoid fragments.

× I prefer the views in my own country because their countryside is peaceful and unspoiled.

✓ I prefer the views in my own country because its countryside is peaceful and unspoiled.

The pronoun 'their' is plural and does not agree with singular noun 'my own country'. Use 'its' to refer back to 'my country'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their antecedents.

× I enjoy the long hills and fresh air. Uh, they remind me of home and help me relax and uh, uh, surroundings of nature really helps me.

✓ I enjoy the long hills and fresh air. They remind me of home and help me relax, and the surroundings of nature really help me.

The phrase 'surroundings of nature really helps me' has subject-verb agreement error: 'surroundings' is plural, so use 'help' not 'helps'. Also add article 'the' before 'surroundings of nature' to make the noun phrase natural. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and include necessary articles for clarity.