Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (how/why, and an example). Use linking words for coherence and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I love photographing landscapes. When I visit scenic places I take many shots and later select the best to share on social media and with friends. Because taking photos helps me focus on details and unwind, I often bring my camera on weekend trips.

Suggestion: Eliminate unclear idioms and hesitations. Use a clear topic sentence and give specific contrasts with linking words (e.g., "however," "on the other hand"). Avoid filler sounds (uh) and correct unusual phrases ("type of mood" instead of "type of moon").

Example: I prefer both urban and rural views depending on my mood. For example, in the city I enjoy photographing skyscrapers and vibrant nightlife; however, when I need peace I prefer calm rural evenings with few people and wide-open views.

Suggestion: Be accurate and coherent: remove fragments and fillers, correct grammar (e.g., "other countries"), and give one clear reason with a specific example. Avoid stray words like "my car" that break coherence.

Example: I mostly prefer views in my own country because I haven't traveled much abroad. For instance, the countryside near my town is picturesque, with barns framed by mountain ranges, and I often go there to relax and take photographs.

× I quite enjoy taking pictures of sceneries.

✓ I quite enjoy taking pictures of scenery.

The noun 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries'. Use the uncountable form 'scenery'. Suggestion: say 'pictures of scenery' or 'scenic views'.

× Whenever I visit a scenic place, I tend to take a lot of pictures.

✓ Whenever I visit a scenic place, I tend to take a lot of pictures.

No grammatical article error detected; sentence is correct. (Included only to show it meets the list and needs no change.)

× Uh, later on I choose the best ones and share on share them on social media and also with my friends.

✓ Later on I choose the best ones and share them on social media and with my friends.

Redundant phrase 'share on share them on' is incorrect. Remove the duplicate 'share on' and use correct verb-object order 'share them on social media'. Also removing filler 'Uh' makes the sentence clearer.

× Uh, photography is a hobby that I enjoy a lot and it helps me relax.

✓ Photography is a hobby I enjoy a lot, and it helps me relax.

Leading filler 'Uh' is unnecessary. Also combining clauses with a comma before 'and' clarifies sentence structure. The sentence is otherwise grammatically correct.

× I'd say it's a mix.

✓ I'd say it's a mix of both.

The original is grammatically acceptable, but adding 'of both' clarifies meaning when contrasting two options. No tense or agreement issues.

× Depends on the type of moon I am in.

✓ It depends on the mood I'm in.

'Depends' lacks an explicit subject; add 'It' for a complete clause. 'type of moon' is incorrect lexically; likely meant 'mood'. Also 'I am in' is more natural as 'I'm in'.

× Sometimes I enjoy uh watching big skyscrapers, uh office towers, and the nightlife in the city, while other times I do enjoy uh a calm evening in a rural area with less people.

✓ Sometimes I enjoy watching skyscrapers, office towers, and the city's nightlife, while other times I enjoy a calm evening in the countryside with fewer people.

Remove filler 'uh'. 'Big' is unnecessary before 'skyscrapers'. Use 'the city's nightlife' for correct possessive. 'Rural area' can be 'countryside' for naturalness. 'Less people' is incorrect; use 'fewer people' for countable nouns.

× I mostly prefer views in my own country since I didn't have the chance to visit the other country sites.

✓ I mostly prefer views in my own country since I haven't had the chance to visit sites in other countries.

Tense: use present perfect 'haven't had' to express experience up to now. 'Other country sites' is awkward; use 'sites in other countries'.

× Uh, my car.

✓ Uh, my countryside?

'My car.' is a sentence fragment without clear meaning in context; likely the speaker mis-spoke. Replace with a meaningful phrase such as 'my countryside' or remove it. Sentence fragments must be completed to convey meaning.

× My countryside is picturesque and it has a barn, uh, with the background of mountains in it.

✓ My countryside is picturesque and has a barn with mountains in the background.

Remove filler 'uh'. 'With the background of mountains in it' is wordy and awkward; use 'with mountains in the background'. Also avoid redundant 'it has' when subject already present.

× I often go there to calm down and unwind.

✓ I often go there to calm down and unwind.

Sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and fits context; no change needed.