Part 1
Examiner
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Candidate
Yes, I like taking pictures of different pills because my brain is not perfect and I can't remember some memories or views when I visit some places so I can remember that memories from my picture.
Examiner
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Candidate
I like rural areas because the future atmosphere is so good and it there are some kind peoples and I like it to feel some nature.
Examiner
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Candidate
I prefer the views in other countries because I find found their sensory and culture more exciting. For example, I love visiting places with different architecture and local food which I can't experience at home.
Do you like taking pictures of different views?
Score: 56.0Suggestion: 回答は意図は伝わるが、多数の語彙ミス・文法ミス・冗長があり、より自然で簡潔な表現が必要です。具体的には: 1) 単語の誤用("pills"→"places/views/photos")を正す。2) 主語・冠詞・時制の誤りを直す("my brain is not perfect"は不自然なので"I have trouble remembering"などに)。3) 1〜3文で要点(好む理由と具体例)を述べ、リンク語(because, so, which)を適切に使う。
Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of places because I often forget details of trips. For example, when I visit a new city I take pictures to help me remember landmarks and moments. This way I can look back and recall the experience more vividly.
Do you prefer views in urban areas or rural areas?
Score: 48.0Suggestion: 意味は伝わるが語彙の選択と文法が不正確です。改善点: 1) 不適切な語彙("future atmosphere"は意味不明、"peoples"は不可算/可算の誤用)を正す。2) 理由を明確に述べ、理由ごとに接続詞(because, and, so)で繋ぐ。3) 具体例や短い説明を付け加えると説得力が増す。
Example: I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and I enjoy being close to nature. For example, I like walking in quiet fields and breathing fresh air, which helps me relax after a busy week.
Do you prefer views in your own country or in other countries?
Score: 64.0Suggestion: 良い点は理由と例を挙げていることですが、語法ミス("find found")、語彙選択("sensory"は不自然)と冗長を直す必要があります。改善点: 1) 動詞の重複と時制を直す("find"のみで十分)。2) "culture"や"architecture"など具体的語彙を使い、"sensory"は"scenery"や"sights"に変更。3) 2〜3文で理由と具体例を簡潔に述べる。
Example: I prefer views in other countries because the scenery and culture are more diverse and exciting. For instance, I enjoy seeing unique architecture and trying local dishes that I can't find at home, which makes travel more memorable.
× Yes, I like taking pictures of different pills because my brain is not perfect and I can't remember some memories or views when I visit some places so I can remember that memories from my picture.
✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different places because my memory is not perfect and I can't remember some views when I visit places, so I can recall those memories from my pictures.
The sentence uses incorrect word choice and some grammar issues. 'pills' should be 'places' (vocabulary error). 'my brain is not perfect' is unnatural; use 'my memory is not perfect' (correct noun). 'some memories or views' is redundant; 'some views' suffices. 'remember that memories' is incorrect agreement and determiners; use 'recall those memories' or 'recall them'. Also plural agreement: 'my picture' should be 'my pictures' because multiple pictures are implied. Suggestions: use precise nouns (place vs pill), avoid redundancy, match determiners and plurals ('those memories', 'pictures'), and prefer 'recall' for remembering from images.
× I like rural areas because the future atmosphere is so good and it there are some kind peoples and I like it to feel some nature.
✓ I like rural areas because the atmosphere is peaceful, and there are some kind people; I enjoy feeling close to nature.
Multiple issues: 'the future atmosphere' is incorrect word choice — likely meant 'the peaceful/relaxed atmosphere' (adjective choice). 'it there are' is ungrammatical (sentence structure). 'peoples' is incorrect plural — use 'people'. 'I like it to feel some nature' is unnatural; use 'I enjoy feeling close to nature' or 'I like experiencing nature'. Suggestions: choose appropriate adjectives (peaceful, relaxed), correct sentence structure (use conjunctions correctly), use 'people' for humans, and use natural verbs for experiencing nature ('feel close to nature', 'be close to nature').
× I prefer the views in other countries because I find found their sensory and culture more exciting.
✓ I prefer the views in other countries because I find their scenery and culture more exciting.
The phrase 'find found' mixes present and past forms; only one is needed. 'sensory' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'scenery'. Use present tense 'find' to match 'I prefer'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent ('I find'), choose correct noun ('scenery' rather than 'sensory'), and maintain parallel structure ('scenery and culture').
× For example, I love visiting places with different architecture and local food which I can't experience at home.
✓ For example, I love visiting places with different architecture and trying local food that I can't experience at home.
The structure 'places with different architecture and local food' links two nouns but the second idea needs a verb to show action; using 'trying local food' clarifies the action. Also, 'which' can be replaced by 'that' for restrictive clauses referring to 'local food' or the experience. Suggestions: maintain parallelism when listing activities ('visiting... and trying...'), and use 'that' for essential clauses.