Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, remove filler words (umm, uh), and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Focus on coherent description (what you photograph, why, and an example).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because they capture my mood and memories. For example, I often photograph cityscapes at sunset and take selfies with friends in front of a skyline, which I later share with them as a reminder of good times.

Suggestion: Improve sentence accuracy and reduce repetition: give a clear topic sentence, use linking words to list reasons, and avoid repeating words. Provide one concise specific example to support your preference.

Example: I prefer urban views because I like the lively atmosphere and the bright city lights. Additionally, the easy public transport and nearby shops make exploring the city at night very convenient, for instance I often walk along the main street after dinner to enjoy the lights.

Suggestion: Clarify and organize your answer: state your current preference directly, avoid unclear words ("wheels"), and give specific reasons with linking words. Mention one concrete example (a landmark or convenience) to support your view.

Example: Now I prefer views in my own country because I feel connected to the people and landmarks. For example, I often visit the historic square in my hometown with friends, and because I know the area well, it is more comfortable and convenient for me than travelling abroad.

× Yes, I'd love to because it can capture my mood and I can share them with my friends.

✓ Yes, I'd love to because it can capture my mood and I can share it with my friends.

The pronoun 'them' refers back to 'pictures' implicitly, but earlier clause uses 'it' (singular 'it can capture my mood') causing pronoun mismatch. Better to be consistent: either refer to 'pictures' explicitly and use plural verbs or keep singular 'it' referring to 'photography' and use 'it' consistently. Here use 'it' and 'it' as singular subject referring to 'photography'. Suggestion: explicitly say 'photography can capture my mood and I can share it with my friends.'

× Sometimes I umm, I especially enjoy photographing myself and uh, with my friends, just like, uh, photo we in yeah, good cityscape and uh, both of us are in it and think it's a good memory.

✓ Sometimes I especially enjoy taking photos of myself and my friends in a nice cityscape; both of us are in the photo and I think it's a good memory.

The original sentence has disfluent fillers and a broken structure with unclear word order ('photo we in yeah'). Corrected version removes fillers, uses natural collocations ('take photos of'), orders phrases logically (subjects, location) and clarifies reference ('the photo'). Suggestions: avoid fillers, plan the sentence before speaking, use simple clauses joined by conjunctions or a semicolon.

× I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the the lively atmosphere and the bright city lights and especially walking along in the street when when it's during the night and I also love the convenience of shopping and the transportation and which make the life more easier.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I enjoy the lively atmosphere and the bright city lights, especially walking along the street at night, and I also love the convenience of shopping and transport, which makes life easier.

Errors include repeated 'the the', incorrect preposition 'in the street' (use 'along the street' or 'along the streets'), incorrect 'when when it's during the night' (redundant words), awkward 'the transportation' (use 'transport' or 'public transportation'), and subject-verb agreement 'which make' should be 'which makes' because it refers to the singular idea of convenience. Also 'more easier' is incorrect (double comparative); use 'easier'. Suggestions: eliminate redundancies, choose correct articles and prepositions, ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid double comparatives.

× When I, when I was a little bit younger, maybe I will choose the wheels in other countries.

✓ When I was a little bit younger, maybe I would choose to travel to other countries.

Tense inconsistency: 'When I was a little bit younger' sets a past-time frame, so the following clause should use a past modal ('would') rather than future 'will'. Also 'choose the wheels' is incorrect collocation; likely intended 'travel' or 'visit other countries'. Suggestions: keep tenses consistent with the time reference and use correct verbs for intended meaning.

× But now I think maybe the wheels in my hometown is better because I love the people, I love the the landmarks and I know all, all of them.

✓ But now I think maybe the views in my hometown are better because I love the people, I love the landmarks, and I know most of them.

Problems: 'the wheels' is incorrect word choice (should be 'views'), subject-verb agreement 'the views ... is' should be 'are'. Repeated 'the the'. 'I know all, all of them' is unnatural; better 'I know most of them' or 'I know all of them' if appropriate. Suggestions: use correct vocabulary ('views'), ensure plural subjects take plural verbs, and avoid repetition.

× I know all of the people, just of my friends.

✓ I know all the people, especially my friends.

Original phrase 'just of my friends' is ungrammatical. Use 'especially my friends' or 'mostly my friends' to convey emphasis. Also 'I know all of the people' may be exaggerated; if you mean you know many people, say 'I know most of the people.' Suggestion: choose appropriate quantifiers and clear modifiers.

× And maybe it's more convenient for me to live.

✓ And maybe it's more convenient for me to live there.

Sentence lacks necessary locational preposition or adverb specifying where 'to live' applies. Adding 'there' (referring to hometown) completes the idea. Suggestion: include explicit location words when context requires them.