Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce repetition and organise into a clear topic sentence plus 1–2 supporting details. Correct minor grammar (remove duplicated words, use singular/plural consistency) and use linking words for coherence. For example, start with a direct statement of liking photography, then give one specific reason (e.g. colours) and one effect (e.g. feeling peaceful).

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because their colours often inspire me. For instance, sunsets and autumn trees have rich tones that make me feel calm and relaxed, so photographing them helps me capture that peaceful mood.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence and then two specific supporting points with linking words (for example, 'first' and 'also'). Reduce fillers (uh, umm, you know) and tighten phrasing. Mention concrete examples (forests, mountain vistas) and explain why they improve photos (light, atmosphere, less distraction).

Example: I prefer rural views. First, the air and light around forests and mountains are cleaner, which makes colours appear richer in photos. Also, rural areas are quieter, so I can focus on composition without distractions.

Suggestion: Make a concise opening sentence stating your preference, then give one clear reason with a specific example and a linking word (e.g. 'because' or 'for example'). Avoid repetition and vague phrases like 'most significant' without explanation. Explain what you hope to gain (new perspectives, cultural variety).

Example: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I want to discover scenes I haven't seen before. For example, I enjoy capturing coastal villages abroad or historic cityscapes because they offer new perspectives and cultural details that inspire my photography.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I'm taking when I'm taking a photo of the view, the colors are are inspiring me and it feels it feels like more peaceful and also the vibe give me the comfort.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I take a photo of a view, the colors inspire me and it feels more peaceful; the vibe also gives me comfort.

Errors: repetitive phrases and incorrect use of continuous form ('when I'm taking' repeated) and incorrect verb forms after 'the colors' and 'the vibe'. Use simple present 'when I take' for habitual actions. After a plural subject 'the colors' use base verb 'inspire' (not 'are inspiring me'). 'Feels more peaceful' uses adjective correctly without 'like'. 'Give' must agree with singular 'vibe' so use 'gives'. Also remove duplicate words and reduce redundancy. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual activities, ensure subject-verb agreement, and avoid repetition.

× Areas, I prefer rural areas. Uh, it's because it's umm, I mean the air is so clean, you know, because of the forest and the mountains. So I really like taking pictures in there because it's like less noisy, you know, there's so much less sound.

✓ I prefer rural areas. It's because the air is very clean due to the forests and mountains. So I really like taking pictures there because it is much less noisy; there is far less sound.

Errors: unnecessary comma and redundant 'Areas,'. Use 'due to' or 'because of' correctly with plural 'forests'. 'Taking pictures in there' is awkward; use 'taking pictures there'. 'It's like less noisy' should be 'it is much less noisy' and 'there's so much less sound' should be 'there is far less sound'. Suggestion: remove filler words, use correct prepositions ('due to'/'because of'), and use 'there' without 'in'.

× I prefer views in other countries because I already know my country, you know, my hometown and also the city where I live. So I want to take pictures of different locations that I haven't seen before.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I already know my country, my hometown, and the city where I live. So I want to take pictures of different locations that I have not seen before.

Errors: contraction 'haven't' is acceptable but ensure tense consistency and formal clarity: 'have not seen before' is present perfect and correct. Commas needed in list. Suggestion: keep present perfect for experiences up to now and punctuate lists correctly.

× So it is most significant. It's most significant thing for me. It should be the different places, you know.

✓ So that is the most important thing for me: visiting different places.

Errors: awkward and repetitive phrasing. 'Most significant' is grammatically possible but sounds unnatural; 'most important thing' is better. 'It should be the different places' is incorrect structure. Suggestion: combine ideas into a single clear sentence and use natural collocations like 'the most important thing' and 'visiting different places'.