Views— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent: state a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler words, and give 1–2 specific reasons with a brief example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

Example: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me remember special moments. For example, when I travel I often photograph interesting streets or landscapes so I can look back at the colours and details later.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer first, then add specific reasons and one concrete example. Reduce repetition and improve grammar (use "they" or "the countryside"), and use linking words like "because" or "so" to show cause and effect.

Example: I prefer rural views because the countryside feels peaceful and full of natural beauty. For instance, when I visit a village I photograph rolling hills and old farms to capture the colours and quiet atmosphere.

Suggestion: Answer directly and explain with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing; use linking phrases such as "because", "for example", or "unlike" to compare home and abroad. Provide one short example of a memorable foreign view.

Example: I prefer views in other countries because they are new and different from what I see at home. For example, when I visited Japan I photographed its temples and gardens because those scenes were unlike anything in my country and very memorable.

× Yes, actually I I take a lot of pics, pictures in my journey days when I found something cute or something like that or something I wanted to remember all of the time.

✓ Yes, actually I take a lot of pictures during my journeys when I find something cute or something I want to remember.

Repeated words and awkward phrasing create a sentence structure problem. Use consistent tense ('take' with habitual action) and streamline phrases: 'during my journeys' is clearer than 'in my journey days'; remove duplicated words and redundant clauses. Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking to avoid repetition and keep verb tenses consistent.

× So I take pictures to stay, to make silver things near.

✓ So I take pictures to keep memories close.

The original uses incorrect and unclear prepositions and idiomatic expressions ('to stay, to make silver things near' is ungrammatical). Use the verb 'keep' with 'memories' and 'close' as the correct prepositional/adverbial phrase. Suggestion: choose common collocations like 'keep memories' or 'cherish moments'.

× Rural areas are are so amazing.

✓ Rural areas are so amazing.

The error is simple word repetition causing a pronoun/word usage issue in flow. Remove the duplicated 'are'. Suggestion: slow down to avoid repeating words.

× Always when I I see some rural area, I feel amazing, like it's like the heaven in earth.

✓ Whenever I see a rural area, I feel amazed, like it's heaven on earth.

Use 'Whenever' for habitual situations and 'feel amazed' (adjective) rather than 'feel amazing' which implies the speaker causes amazement. Idiomatically, say 'heaven on earth' not 'the heaven in earth'. Also remove repeated 'I'. Suggestion: learn common collocations: 'feel amazed' and 'heaven on earth'.

× So I like take pictures of the so I can realize how beauty is our plan.

✓ So I like to take pictures so I can remember how beautiful our land is.

Original has incorrect verb form 'like take', wrong word order, and wrong nouns ('plan' instead of 'land'). Use infinitive 'like to take', purpose 'so I can remember', adjective 'beautiful', and correct noun 'land'. Suggestion: match verb patterns (like to do) and check vocabulary meaning.

× Of course I like taking I like views in another country because it's seeing it the first time.

✓ Of course I like seeing views in another country because it's my first time seeing them there.

Repeated phrase and awkward tense/pronoun use. Use 'see' in gerund form and 'first time' construction with possessive 'my'. Also plural 'views' with 'them'. Suggestion: avoid repeating verbs and maintain clear subject references.

× It's not usual I can see it like in my country.

✓ It's not usual to see them like I can in my country.

Incorrect sentence structure and adverb use. Use infinitive 'to see' and compare properly: 'like I can in my country'. Suggestion: practice comparative constructions: 'not usual to...' and place clauses logically.

× I can see the the view every time I want and anytime not like when I travel to another country.

✓ I can see the view anytime I want at home, unlike when I travel to another country.

Repeated 'the', awkward adverb placement. Use 'anytime I want at home' and contrast with 'unlike when I travel'. Suggestion: avoid repeating articles and place adverbs next to verbs they modify.

× So something is new, it is really deserve.

✓ So something is new; it really deserves attention.

Incorrect verb usage: 'deserve' requires subject that receives or deserves something; use 'deserves' (third-person singular) and add object 'attention' or rephrase 'it is really worth it'. The comma splice is fixed with a semicolon. Suggestion: ensure verbs match subjects and provide clear objects for verbs like 'deserve'.