Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences clearer and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because it is a quiet place that helps me concentrate. Moreover, borrowing books is cheaper than buying new ones, which is very helpful for me.

Suggestion: Your answer is good but a bit wordy and some phrases are unclear. Try to use simpler and clearer expressions, and use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition.

Example: At present, I don't visit the library often because I am busy preparing for my future studies. However, during my university days, I used to go regularly since the library provided a quiet environment and plenty of resources that supported my learning.

Suggestion: Your answer is interesting but the sentence structure is a bit awkward. Try to use correct prepositions and clearer phrasing. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Example: Yes, I used to go to the library as a child because I was very interested in cars. I often read books about how cars are manufactured and how different parts are assembled in factories.

Suggestion: Your answer has good points but contains some repetition and grammatical errors. Avoid repeating words and ensure subject-verb agreement. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent and concise.

Example: Yes, many Chinese children often go to the library because both parents and schools encourage good reading habits. Libraries offer a quiet place to study and provide a wide range of books in different genres, which helps children improve their knowledge and interests.

× Absolutely, I go to the library often it as it is a quiet place which provides silence to study which helps to get me focus and also it is cheaper to borrow the books rather than buying the new one.

✓ Absolutely, I go to the library often as it is a quiet place that provides silence for studying, which helps me to focus, and also it is cheaper to borrow books rather than buying new ones.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with improper conjunctions and unclear phrasing. 'It as it is' is incorrect; it should be 'as it is'. 'Provides silence to study' is awkward; 'provides silence for studying' is better. 'Helps to get me focus' is incorrect; 'helps me to focus' is correct. 'The books' and 'the new one' are incorrect articles and number usage; 'books' and 'new ones' are appropriate. The sentence structure needs to be broken down and connected properly for clarity.

× Currently, I am busy preparing for my future studies, so I don't visit the library often. However, when I was pursuing my tertiary education, I used to visit the library regularly because it offered a quiet environment and there were resources available in a large amount which held me in my education.

✓ Currently, I am busy preparing for my future studies, so I don't visit the library often. However, when I was pursuing my tertiary education, I used to visit the library regularly because it offered a quiet environment and there were many resources available which helped me in my education.

The phrase 'resources available in a large amount' is awkward; 'many resources available' is more natural. 'Which held me in my education' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'which helped me in my education' to indicate assistance in learning. The past tense 'held' is misused here.

× I vividly remember that I used to go to library as a child as I am very keen in interest of cars and I used to go to study about how the cars are manufactured and how different units of car are assembled in the factories.

✓ I vividly remember that I used to go to the library as a child because I am very keenly interested in cars, and I used to study how cars are manufactured and how different units of cars are assembled in factories.

The phrase 'go to library' is missing the definite article 'the'. 'Keen in interest of cars' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'keenly interested in cars'. 'Go to study about' is awkward; 'used to study' is better. 'The cars' and 'units of car' should be plural without 'the' when speaking generally. 'In the factories' can be simplified to 'in factories'.

× Yes, many Chinese children often go to the library because both parents as well as the schools encourage or suggest reading reading about reading habits. Libraries provide a quiet place for them to study and access a wide amount or wide range of books with different genres, which helps you to improve their knowledge and interests.

✓ Yes, many Chinese children often go to the library because both parents as well as schools encourage reading habits. Libraries provide a quiet place for them to study and access a wide range of books with different genres, which helps them to improve their knowledge and interests.

The phrase 'encourage or suggest reading reading about reading habits' is repetitive and unclear; it should be 'encourage reading habits'. 'A wide amount or wide range' is redundant; 'a wide range' is correct. 'Helps you to improve their knowledge' mixes pronouns incorrectly; it should be 'helps them to improve their knowledge'. The prepositions and pronouns need correction for clarity and correctness.