Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 'because' 뒤에 바로 이유를 명확히 제시하고, 문장을 간결하게 구성하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 'start'라는 단어 사용이 부적절하며, 전치사 사용도 개선해야 합니다.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because I have many assignments to complete. I usually study subjects like mathematics, science, and engineering there.

Suggestion: 답변이 반복적이고 문법적으로 부자연스럽습니다. 주제를 명확히 하고, 추가 설명 시 연결어를 사용하여 문장을 자연스럽게 이어가야 합니다. 전공 관련 설명도 더 구체적으로 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

Example: I usually study subjects related to my major, biosystem engineering. Recently, I have been focusing more on biology engineering because it is closely related to my field.

Suggestion: 시제 일관성이 부족하고 문장 구조가 어색합니다. 과거 시제를 일관되게 사용하고, 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

Example: No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because there wasn't one in my neighborhood. However, when I was 12, the city built a library, so I started going there.

Suggestion: 내용이 불명확하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 자신의 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 관련 어휘를 정확히 사용하는 연습이 필요합니다. 또한, 추측을 할 때는 조심스럽게 표현하는 것이 좋습니다.

Example: I'm not sure about Chinese children, but I have heard that education is very important in China. Therefore, I think many Chinese kids often visit libraries to study.

× I usually start mathematics and science and engineering.

✓ I usually study mathematics, science, and engineering.

'Start' is not appropriate here; the student means to say they study these subjects. Using 'study' correctly conveys the intended meaning. 또한, 과목 나열 시 쉼표를 사용하여 명확하게 구분하는 것이 좋습니다.

× In recent days I usually study biology engineering.

✓ Recently, I usually study biological engineering.

'In recent days' is awkward; 'Recently' is more natural. Also, 'biology engineering' should be 'biological engineering' to correctly describe the field of study. 문법적으로 올바른 형용사 형태를 사용해야 합니다.

× My major is biosystem engineering, so my major should study.

✓ My major is biosystems engineering, so I should study it.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'My major should study' is incorrect; the student should say 'I should study it' to express that they need to study their major. 문장 구조를 명확히 하여 주어와 동사의 관계를 올바르게 표현해야 합니다.

× When I was a kid in my neighborhood there isn't any library so I can't go library easily.

✓ When I was a kid, there wasn't any library in my neighborhood, so I couldn't go to the library easily.

Tense inconsistency: 'isn't' and 'can't' should be past tense 'wasn't' and 'couldn't' to match 'When I was a kid'. Also, 'go library' is incorrect; it should be 'go to the library'. 시제 일치와 전치사 사용에 주의해야 합니다.

× But when I was 12 years old there the city built a library so I can go there.

✓ But when I was 12 years old, the city built a library, so I could go there.

The sentence structure is incorrect; 'there the city built a library' should be 'the city built a library'. Also, 'can' should be past tense 'could' to match the past time frame. 문장 구조와 시제 일치에 주의해야 합니다.

× When I was a kid in my neighborhood there isn't any library so I can't go library easily.

✓ When I was a kid, there wasn't any library in my neighborhood, so I couldn't go to the library easily.

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' is incorrect. The phrase should be 'go to the library'. 전치사 사용이 올바르지 않아 의미 전달에 문제가 있습니다.

× Actually I'm not Chinese so I don't know about that, but I heard about the Chinese kids education.

✓ Actually, I'm not Chinese, so I don't know about that, but I have heard about Chinese kids' education.

'Chinese kids education' should be 'Chinese kids' education' to show possession. Also, 'have heard' is more appropriate for recent experience. 소유격 표현과 시제 사용에 주의해야 합니다.

× They are very fashion to education.

✓ They are very focused on education.

'Fashion' is a noun and incorrectly used here; the correct adjective is 'fashionable', but the intended meaning is likely 'focused' or 'serious' about education. 의미에 맞는 형용사를 사용해야 합니다.

× So I think the Chinese kids will go rival.

✓ So I think Chinese kids will go to the library.

'Go rival' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the student meant 'go to the library'. 문장 구조와 단어 선택이 부적절하여 의미 전달이 어렵습니다.