Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks coherence. Try to avoid repeating phrases like 'as well' and 'and'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary related to libraries and reading.

Example: Yes, I often visit the library because it offers a quiet environment where I can concentrate. Moreover, I enjoy reading various books that help me gain knowledge and learn new stories.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question. Use linking words to add supporting details and be specific about what you study. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve sentence structure.

Example: Usually, I focus on studying stories and novels in the library because they provide valuable information and improve my understanding of literature.

Suggestion: Your answer contains grammatical errors and some unclear phrases like 'didn't win the library'. Use correct past tense forms and clarify your points. Also, try to be concise and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly.

Example: No, I did not go to the library as a child because I grew up in a village without school facilities nearby. I had to walk a long distance to attend school, so visiting the library was not possible.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains grammatical mistakes. Avoid repeating phrases like 'in my point of view' multiple times. Provide a clear opinion with reasons and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, improve sentence structure for clarity.

Example: In my opinion, many Chinese children often visit libraries because China is a developed country with good educational resources and facilities.

× Yes, I often go to the library for reading books and as well As for peace as well.

✓ Yes, I often go to the library to read books and also for peace.

The phrase 'and as well As for peace as well' is redundant and incorrectly structured. Use 'and also' or 'as well as' to connect ideas properly. Here, 'to read books and also for peace' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× So it is quite peaceful for me and also to gain a lot of knowledge and stories and and information.

✓ So it is quite peaceful for me, and I also gain a lot of knowledge, stories, and information.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject for the second part and has repeated 'and'. Adding 'I also gain' clarifies the subject and improves sentence structure.

× Talking about the usually I do something in the library is I mainly focused in studying some kind of stories and novels so I can know the what the typical information provides and also.

✓ Usually, what I do in the library is mainly focus on studying stories and novels so I can learn the typical information they provide.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical. 'Talking about the usually' is incorrect; 'Usually' suffices. 'I mainly focused in studying' should be 'I mainly focus on studying' to match present tense and correct preposition. 'Know the what the typical information provides' is incorrect; 'learn the typical information they provide' is better.

× No, I didn't went to the library when I was a kid because as I have grown in the village there is no any facilities of schools as well.

✓ No, I didn't go to the library when I was a kid because, as I grew up in the village, there were no school facilities.

After 'didn't', the base form of the verb should be used, so 'went' is incorrect; it should be 'go'. 'As I have grown' should be 'as I grew up' to match past tense. 'There is no any facilities' is incorrect; 'there were no school facilities' is correct.

× I have to walk away for 1 1/2 years to go to schools and it was quite difficult for me.

✓ I had to walk for one and a half hours to go to school, and it was quite difficult for me.

'Walk away for 1 1/2 years' is incorrect; likely the intended meaning is 'walk for one and a half hours'. Also, 'schools' should be singular 'school' when referring to the institution in general.

× So I didn't win the library when I was a kid.

✓ So I didn't go to the library when I was a kid.

'Didn't win' is incorrect; after 'didn't', the base verb 'go' should be used. 'Win' is not appropriate here.

× Yeah, in my point of view, I didn't know the what other country has about the library.

✓ Yeah, in my point of view, I don't know what other countries have regarding libraries.

'Didn't know' is past tense but the context suggests present. 'The what other country has about the library' is ungrammatical; it should be 'what other countries have regarding libraries'. Also, 'country' should be plural 'countries'.

× But talking about the this time, China is one of the most developed countries.

✓ But talking about the present time, China is one of the most developed countries.

'The this time' is incorrect; it should be 'the present time' or simply 'now'.

× So in my point of view, yeah, China kids often go to the library.

✓ So in my point of view, yes, Chinese kids often go to the library.

'China kids' is incorrect; the correct adjective form is 'Chinese kids'. Also, 'yeah' is informal; 'yes' is more appropriate in this context.