Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, instead of repeating 'really' and using 'but' twice, you can say: 'I don't often go to the library because there isn't one near me. Although my college has a library, it mainly has academic books, which don't interest me.'

Example: I don't often go to the library because there isn't one near me. Although my college has a library, it mainly has academic books, which don't interest me.

Suggestion: Avoid starting sentences with contradictory phrases like 'Even though' followed by 'but'. Use linking words properly to make your answer coherent. Also, try to be more specific about your activities. For example, say: 'When I visit the library, I usually read quietly or work on group projects with my team. I also go there if I find a book I want to read.'

Example: When I visit the library, I usually read quietly or work on group projects with my team. I also go there if I find a book I want to read.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, say: 'I couldn't often go to the library as a kid because my school's library was mostly closed to general students and only used for academic purposes. Therefore, I relied on my teachers and friends for books.'

Example: I couldn't often go to the library as a kid because my school's library was mostly closed to general students and only used for academic purposes. Therefore, I relied on my teachers and friends for books.

Suggestion: Try to organize your answer more clearly and avoid run-on sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific. For example: 'I'm not sure about Chinese kids because I'm from Bangladesh. However, many of my friends here love going to the library because they enjoy reading various books, not just academic ones.'

Example: I'm not sure about Chinese kids because I'm from Bangladesh. However, many of my friends here love going to the library because they enjoy reading various books, not just academic ones.

× I don't really go to the library often because I don't really have one around my surroundings, but although my college does have one library but it is more focused on academic books which doesn't really go with my choices of books that I want to read, so no.

✓ I don't really go to the library often because I don't really have one around my surroundings, although my college does have a library, but it is more focused on academic books which don't really match my choice of books that I want to read, so no.

The sentence uses both 'but' and 'although' together incorrectly, which is redundant and confusing. Use either 'although' or 'but' to connect contrasting ideas, not both. Also, 'one library' should be 'a library' and 'doesn't' should be 'don't' to agree with the plural 'books'. Suggestions: remove 'but' after 'although' and correct verb agreement.

× ...which doesn't really go with my choices of books that I want to read...

✓ ...which don't really match my choice of books that I want to read...

The phrase 'choices of books' is awkward; 'choice of books' is more natural. Also, 'doesn't' is singular but 'books' is plural, so the verb should be 'don't'. The verb 'go with' is better replaced with 'match' for clarity.

× Even though I do not visit the library often, but when I do I usually use it for reading quietly or doing some group works together with my team.

✓ Even though I do not visit the library often, when I do I usually use it for reading quietly or doing some group work together with my team.

Using both 'Even though' and 'but' together is incorrect; 'Even though' already introduces a contrast, so 'but' is unnecessary and should be removed. Also, 'group works' should be 'group work' as 'work' is uncountable in this context.

× ...doing some group works together with my team.

✓ ...doing some group work together with my team.

The word 'work' in this context is uncountable, so 'group works' is incorrect. Use 'group work' without 's' to refer to collaborative tasks.

× And also if anything I want to read that book is available in the library, so I go there.

✓ Also, if the book I want to read is available in the library, I go there.

The original sentence is awkward and unclear. 'If anything I want to read that book is available' is confusing. The corrected sentence clarifies the condition and removes unnecessary words for better flow.

× I actually couldn't go to the library when I was a kid, often because my school's library was mostly closed to the general students and only accessible for the academic purposes.

✓ I actually couldn't go to the library when I was a kid, often because my school's library was mostly closed to general students and only accessible for academic purposes.

The phrase 'the general students' is incorrect; 'general students' without 'the' is better. Also, 'the academic purposes' should be 'academic purposes' without 'the' because it is a general concept.

× ...my school's library was mostly closed to the general students...

✓ ...my school's library was mostly closed to general students...

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'general students' because it refers to a general group, not a specific set. Removing 'the' improves the sentence.

× ...only accessible for the academic purposes.

✓ ...only accessible for academic purposes.

The definite article 'the' is unnecessary before 'academic purposes' because it refers to purposes in general, not specific ones.

× So instead I had to rely on my teachers or my friends for other books that I wanted to read.

✓ So instead, I had to rely on my teachers or my friends for other books that I wanted to read.

A comma after 'So instead' improves sentence clarity and flow.

× I'm not really sure about the Chinese kids because I'm not Chinese, I'm from Bangladesh, so most of our friends do love to go to the library because they tend to read a lot of books and they are not really into the academic only so they love it.

✓ I'm not really sure about Chinese kids because I'm not Chinese; I'm from Bangladesh. Most of our friends love to go to the library because they tend to read a lot of books and are not only into academic ones, so they love it.

The original sentence is a run-on with multiple ideas joined improperly. Using semicolons and periods separates ideas clearly. 'The Chinese kids' should be 'Chinese kids' without 'the'. 'Academic only' is awkward; 'not only into academic ones' is clearer. Also, 'do love' can be simplified to 'love'.