Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but you made a small mistake by saying the library is an "uncomfortable" place, which contradicts your point. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly, and avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library, especially when I have an important exam. Because my home is usually noisy and full of distractions like the TV and outside sounds, I find it hard to concentrate there. Therefore, the library is a quiet and comfortable place where I can focus better on my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer is short and somewhat unclear. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details using linking words. Also, correct grammar mistakes and use more natural expressions.

Example: Usually, I read history books in the library when I don't have an important exam. I enjoy exploring different historical topics because the library has many resources that help me learn more.

Suggestion: Your answer is too long and lacks clear structure. Try to divide your answer into sentences with proper grammar and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid informal words like "daddy" and improve clarity.

Example: Unfortunately, I did not go to the library when I was a kid because it was far from my home and I could not go by myself. Moreover, my father did not believe in libraries and always said that I could study at home. He also bought me any books I wanted. However, after I grew up, I started going to the library every day.

Suggestion: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear opinion with reasons, use linking words, and avoid vague expressions. Also, use more appropriate vocabulary to express your ideas.

Example: I am not sure if Chinese kids often go to the library, but I think it is a good habit. If they do not go regularly, I suggest they should because libraries help improve knowledge and reading can develop the mind and understanding of many things.

× I find it difficult to study at home because it is usually noisy and messy with distraction like the TV and outside sounds.

✓ I find it difficult to study at home because it is usually noisy and messy with distractions like the TV and outside sounds.

The word 'distraction' should be plural 'distractions' because it refers to multiple sources of disturbance, such as the TV and outside sounds. Using the plural form correctly matches the context.

× The library is a quiet and uncomfortable place where I can focus better on my studies.

✓ The library is a quiet and comfortable place where I can focus better on my studies.

The adjective 'uncomfortable' contradicts the intended meaning. The student likely meant 'comfortable' to express a positive environment for studying. Using the correct adjective clarifies the meaning.

× If I don't have a very important exam with my study, I am searching about the history book and I read it at the library.

✓ If I don't have a very important exam for my studies, I search for history books and read them at the library.

The phrase 'am searching about' is incorrect; the correct form is 'search for'. Also, 'history book' should be plural 'history books' to generalize, and 'read it' should be 'read them' to agree with the plural noun. Additionally, 'with my study' should be 'for my studies' to express purpose.

× Unfortunately not because I can't go to the library by myself, it's not close to my home and my daddy doesn't believe in library and always say you can't study at home and any books you want I buy it for you and when I grow up I go to the library every day.

✓ Unfortunately not because I couldn't go to the library by myself, it wasn't close to my home and my daddy didn't believe in the library and always said you can't study at home and any books you want I will buy for you, and when I grew up I went to the library every day.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the context is about the past, verbs should be in past tense: 'can't' to 'couldn't', 'doesn't believe' to 'didn't believe', 'say' to 'said', 'grow up' to 'grew up', and 'go' to 'went'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'.

× my daddy doesn't believe in library

✓ my daddy doesn't believe in the library

The noun 'library' is a specific place here, so it requires the definite article 'the' to specify it.

× and always say you can't study at home and any books you want I buy it for you

✓ and always said you can't study at home and any books you want I will buy for you

The verb 'say' should be in past tense 'said' to match the past context. Also, 'I buy it for you' should be 'I will buy for you' to express future intention. The modal verb 'will' is appropriate here.

× I don't know about Chinese kids but I guess yes when they go to the library every day and if they don't, I suggest to do that because library can improve our soul and reading can improve our brain instead and knowing about everything.

✓ I don't know about Chinese kids but I guess yes, they go to the library every day and if they don't, I suggest they do that because the library can improve our soul and reading can improve our brain and knowledge about everything.

The phrase 'I suggest to do that' is incorrect; it should be 'I suggest they do that'. Also, 'library' needs the definite article 'the'. The phrase 'improve our brain instead and knowing about everything' is awkward; 'improve our brain and knowledge about everything' is clearer and grammatically correct.