Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and unclear expressions. For example, say "I often go to the library, usually about three times a week, because I am a big fan of books. I enjoy various genres such as horror and romance. I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them because it is more eco-friendly."

Example: I often go to the library, usually about three times a week, because I am a big fan of books. I enjoy various genres such as horror and romance. I prefer borrowing books rather than buying them because it is more eco-friendly.

Suggestion: Make your answer more concise and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. For example, "I usually read in the library because the atmosphere there is different from my home, which helps me concentrate better."

Example: I usually read in the library because the atmosphere there is different from my home, which helps me concentrate better.

Suggestion: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Directly answer the question and provide supporting details. For example, "Yes, I went to the library when I was a child, especially during primary school, because I have always loved reading books."

Example: Yes, I went to the library when I was a child, especially during primary school, because I have always loved reading books.

Suggestion: Improve clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain reasons. For example, "Unfortunately, many Chinese kids do not often go to the library because they prefer staying at home to study or use social media, such as the Chinese version of TikTok, which they find more interesting."

Example: Unfortunately, many Chinese kids do not often go to the library because they prefer staying at home to study or use social media, such as the Chinese version of TikTok, which they find more interesting.

× Yes I go to the library for oftenly, usually three times a week I believe and I'm a big fan of books.

✓ Yes, I go to the library often, usually three times a week I believe, and I'm a big fan of books.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. Also, 'for oftenly' is an incorrect phrase; 'often' should be placed directly after the verb 'go'. Additionally, commas are needed to separate clauses for clarity.

× I love books from genre to genre such as horror and romance and I prefer boring to buying one as I think is more eco friendly.

✓ I love books from genre to genre such as horror and romance, and I prefer borrowing to buying them as I think it is more eco-friendly.

The word 'boring' is incorrect; the intended word is 'borrowing'. Also, 'buying one' should be 'buying them' to refer to books in plural. The phrase 'I think is more eco friendly' lacks a subject; it should be 'I think it is more eco-friendly'. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× because I think the vibes in the library is very different from what I have in my home and which helps me to concentrate better.

✓ because I think the vibes in the library are very different from what I have at home, which helps me to concentrate better.

The subject 'vibes' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. Also, 'in my home' is better expressed as 'at home'. The relative pronoun 'which' should directly follow the clause it modifies without 'and'.

× Guess I could be the library when I was a kid like when I was primary because I am a huge friends of book.

✓ I guess I used to go to the library when I was a kid, like when I was in primary school, because I am a huge fan of books.

The phrase 'could be the library' is incorrect; it should be 'used to go to the library'. 'When I was primary' should be 'when I was in primary school'. 'Friends of book' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'fan of books'.

× Since I'm very young and I love to read books, I think I consider it as a surprise.

✓ Since I was very young and I love to read books, I think I consider it a surprise.

The tense should be past 'was' instead of 'am' to match 'since I was very young'. The phrase 'consider it as a surprise' is incorrect; 'consider it a surprise' is correct without 'as'.

× Unfortunately no, because nowadays a lot of Chinese kids, they prefer staying at home and maybe schooling.

✓ Unfortunately, no, because nowadays a lot of Chinese kids prefer staying at home and maybe studying.

The pronoun 'they' is redundant after 'a lot of Chinese kids'. 'Schooling' is a noun; the correct verb form is 'studying'. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× Social media is the Chinese version of Tiktok and they think it's more interesting for this.

✓ Social media is the Chinese version of TikTok, and they think it's more interesting than this.

The sentence lacks clarity; 'for this' is incorrect. The comparison should be 'more interesting than this'. Also, 'TikTok' should be capitalized properly. A comma before 'and' improves readability.