Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is generally clear but a bit lengthy and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

Example: Yes, I occasionally visit the college library to borrow textbooks for my subjects, especially when I can't find them online for free.

Suggestion: Your answer is clear and well-structured but could be improved by using linking words to connect your ideas and by adding a bit more detail to make it more engaging.

Example: In the library, I usually complete my assignments and use the computers to access the Internet for my projects. Additionally, I borrow books related to my subjects to support my studies.

Suggestion: Your answer is good with specific details and a personal example. To improve, try to avoid starting sentences with conjunctions like 'And so' and use linking words to make your answer more fluent.

Example: I loved going to the school library as a child because it had a wide range of books, from fantasy novels to science experiments. For instance, I once found a DIY experiments book that I borrowed and enjoyed doing at home.

Suggestion: Your answer is somewhat vague and indirect. Try to respond more directly to the question and organise your ideas clearly using linking words. Avoid phrases like 'I wouldn't know much' and instead give a general opinion or example.

Example: Although I am not certain, I believe many Chinese children often visit libraries because the country has excellent library facilities, a wide selection of books, and a rich cultural history that attracts young readers.

× I only go to the library when I do not get the textbooks I want online because certain materials online require you to pay, whereas in the library you can get.

✓ I only go to the library when I do not get the textbooks I want online because certain materials online require you to pay, whereas in the library you can get them.

The sentence is missing the object 'them' after 'can get' which is necessary to complete the meaning. Without it, the sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'them' clarifies that you can get the textbooks in the library.

× I also use the computer provided by the library to get access to the Internet and work on my projects.

✓ I also use the computer provided by the library to access the Internet and work on my projects.

The phrase 'get access to' is less concise and slightly awkward. The correct and more natural expression is 'access the Internet' without 'get'. This improves fluency and correctness.

× I wouldn't know much about what Chinese kids do, but I could tell you that all kids would enjoy going to the library, especially in China because of the great infrastructure of libraries that they have and the wide variety of books and also the rich history would be interesting for the children.

✓ I wouldn't know much about what Chinese kids do, but I could tell you that all kids would enjoy going to the library, especially in China because of the great library infrastructure they have, the wide variety of books, and also the rich history that would be interesting for the children.

The phrase 'infrastructure of libraries' is awkward; 'library infrastructure' is more natural. Also, the sentence lacked proper conjunctions and articles to connect ideas smoothly. Adding 'that' before 'would be interesting' clarifies the subject. These changes improve clarity and grammatical correctness.