Library— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Try to avoid repetition and hesitations to make your answer more fluent and natural. Also, organise your ideas clearly by stating a main reason and then supporting it with details, using linking words to connect your points.

Example: Yes, I often go to the library because I find the atmosphere very conducive to studying. Moreover, the wide range of books available helps me access useful resources efficiently.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words such as 'umm' and avoid repeating words. Begin with a clear topic sentence and then add specific details using linking words to make your answer coherent.

Example: In the library, I usually focus on studying the subjects I need to prepare for. For example, when I was preparing for my exams, I visited the library almost every day. Additionally, I enjoy reading books there to relax.

Suggestion: Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear endings. Provide a clear and complete answer with specific details, linking your ideas logically.

Example: Yes, I did. My mother used to take me to the library almost every weekend, where she would read story books to me. I usually stayed there for at least two hours, which sometimes made my mother quite tired.

Suggestion: Work on clarity and sentence structure. Avoid filler words and incomplete ideas. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples.

Example: Yes, Chinese children often visit libraries. For instance, schools organise trips to local libraries during weekdays, and we also receive library cards that allow us to attend events such as performances by actors.

× I think I generally I get to like I, I, I will be more efficient if I'm studying in the library and also the amount of books and everything that they have in the.

✓ I think I generally get to like it, I will be more efficient if I'm studying in the library and also the number of books and everything that they have there.

The phrase 'the amount of books' is incorrect because 'amount' is used with uncountable nouns. 'Books' are countable, so 'number of books' is correct. Also, the sentence was incomplete and unclear; adding 'it' after 'like' clarifies the meaning, and 'there' specifies the location.

× Also the amount of books and everything that they have in the.

✓ Also the number of books and everything that they have there.

The preposition 'in the' is incomplete and unclear. It should be 'there' to indicate the location properly.

× I usually just start a UMM like whatever I need to study UMM.

✓ I usually just start studying whatever I need to study.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains filler words 'UMM' which disrupt the sentence flow. Removing fillers and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Earlier on I was preparing for my exam so I went to the library almost like on a daily daily basis to study UMM.

✓ Earlier on, I was preparing for my exam, so I went to the library almost daily to study.

The phrase 'on a daily daily basis' is redundant; 'almost daily' is sufficient. Also, 'UMM' is a filler and should be removed for clarity. Commas improve sentence flow.

× Also, I like to enjoy reading books in the library.

✓ Also, I like to enjoy reading books at the library.

The preposition 'in' is acceptable but 'at' is more commonly used when referring to being present at a location like a library for an activity.

× Yes, I did. I remember my mom used to take me to the library almost every weekend and then she would read books to me, those story books and and usually I would be there for at least two hours now and my mom would get really tired because that.

✓ Yes, I did. I remember my mom used to take me to the library almost every weekend, and then she would read story books to me. Usually, I would be there for at least two hours, and my mom would get really tired because of that.

The sentence was run-on and unclear. Adding commas and splitting into two sentences improves readability. 'Now' is incorrect in past context and is removed. 'Because that' is incomplete; 'because of that' is correct.

× Absolutely umm the others of local libraries for us to visit.

✓ Absolutely, there are lots of local libraries for us to visit.

The phrase 'the others of local libraries' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'there are lots of local libraries' to correctly express existence and quantity.

× Also our schools will organise school trips to the libraries on our weekdays and also we will get a lot from library tickets to like have organised some actors.

✓ Also, our schools organise school trips to the libraries on weekdays, and we also get a lot from library tickets, like organised events with actors.

The phrase 'on our weekdays' is better as 'on weekdays'. The latter part of the sentence was unclear; rephrasing to 'organised events with actors' clarifies the meaning. 'Will organise' changed to 'organise' to match habitual action.